Wanted

[Zothar]

He watches from the far table
He hears the other's taunting voices
His mind is closed, he is unstable
He wants to stop the constant noises.

Every day he wakes up haunted
Empty inside, he has gone numb
All he wants is to be wanted
Nobody knows where he comes from.

He walks in, his eyes diluted
A deadly secret in his pocket
Five students dead, himself included
No one had a chance to stop it.

Should we blame the family,
Or the teachers for his fall?
Is it his own fault, or the bully,
Or does responsibility fall on us all?

[Delta40]

sounds like some high school massacre. As a suggestion of an improvement, there are way too many "he' in this poem. I have struggled with this too and look for ways to make the poem a little more narrative in style.

I hope this helps

[Twota]

I like it, reminds me of a song for three days grace.

[hillwalker]

A controversial theme handled quite subtly - up to a point - but I felt the final stanza spoilt it. It's too simplistic.
Why should responsibility fall upon us all?
After quite a promising start it ends on rather a cheap note.

H