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Dr.reid_16
07-04-2011, 11:32 AM
I have a new poem but I'm having a little trouble with the title. If someone can read it and suggest an appropriate title I would greatly appreciate it!


Death set the sun,
and souls stirred about in the wind.
The road ahead is dark and empty.
Carry on I must, for I need to leave this place.

My love has left,
my heart has cracked,
and now I have no purpose.

I began my journey,
and ventured into the abyss.
Down the road.

Trees wept with quiet sorrow,
the cool breeze perpetuates,
and runs through my body.
As I walk, and walk,
the moon gazes upon me with its deserted eyes.

Each step I take is an emotional stab in the heart.
I am alone,
and I shall remain alone.
Tears stream down my cheeks,
my mind began to race.

A park was in the distance,
“Finally,” I said, “Sanctuary.”
I sat on a bench and started to sob.
I was startled when someone sat beside me.
We talked for a while, then suddenly,
I grabbed death’s hand and walked into the forest,
leaving everything behind.

Twota
07-04-2011, 12:42 PM
I like it ;D but it's a bit confusing tho, no idea about title