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Delta40
07-02-2011, 12:57 AM
I relish your leathery confessions
like an exploding fruity burst.

How natural and stringy is the texture
of malfeasance which rolls across my dry lips?

Let my hand smooth such academic demise with visible care.

As the mercury cools on Meadows Law,
your husky testimony finally becomes mute.

The miscarried face of justice releases nondescript babes
professionally etched in your souless exit.

Their bloody clots, snagged for years on false statistics cry out:

You hurt us!

Such aural rage reminds me of your imminent, sallow end.

One of seventy six million I'd say because anything less is murder.

I stand and straighten my uniform, climaxing at your terminal groan.

Seconds later, I check my own pulse;
knowing excitement seldom comes packaged this way.

PrinceMyshkin
07-02-2011, 07:19 AM
Some of this, e.g.


"The miscarried face of justice releases those nondescript babes
professionally etched in your souless exit.
Their bloody clots, snagged for years on false statistics cry out:"


is beyond my comprehension, but I deeply admire the force and dignity of all the lines.

Delta40
07-02-2011, 07:47 AM
Thank you Prince. Your comments are always welcomed.

everyadventure
07-02-2011, 10:00 AM
Ooo, pure evil!

ShadowsCool
07-02-2011, 01:07 PM
I actually enjoy this even though I don't understand all parts

Delta40
07-02-2011, 07:42 PM
I knew it would not be clear when I wrote it because it was based on 'flecks' of injustices I was reading. Again, I threw it all together and boiled it up....

I should be more serious about my writing but this is where I am atm.

paperleaves
07-02-2011, 09:44 PM
wow, this is amazing!

Delta40
07-02-2011, 10:19 PM
Thanks Paperleaves

MystyrMystyry
07-02-2011, 10:51 PM
This is a good one Delta - I actually wrote an extended analysis of it earlier but the internet wouldn't let me post it, and now it's gone from my copy cache because of something else

See if this works