Attraction

[Bar22do]

Again,
her scream pierces the calm
and tears the desert
in shreds.

She roams torrid stretches,
urging dust to blind,
wind to hurl,
ravens to crush her,

where his fingers clung,
briefly resisting the abyss,
before his body hit the rocks
that surged beneath.

[Delta40]

wow! Oh that scream! Those fingers loosening just before the plummet.....What a haunting piece Bar

[everyadventure]

Gracious! *SHUDDER*

[Hawkman]

Powerful, concise, effective. Good one, Bar.

Live long and prosper - H

[paperleaves]

Holy....cannoli.
That was powerful, striking, and absolutely beautiful. A haunting piece, for sure. You have such beautiful command of your words!

[AuntShecky]

"Again"?
How can we account for this quirk in the human psyche that finds revisiting the scene of a tragedy so-- as your title suggests--"attractive"? Why do we want to re-live or
recapitulate what causes pain? Is it mere wallowing in pain, or is it a way to come to grips with our grief? Hence,
the national obsession (over in these parts anyway, Bar)
on this so-called "closure."

We'd have to pore over book after book on psychology to find the answer, yet this very short and succinct piece of verse of yours speaks volumes.

[Bar22do]

"Again"?
How can we account for this quirk in the human psyche that finds revisiting the scene of a tragedy so-- as your title suggests--"attractive"? Why do we want to re-live or recapitulate what causes pain? Is it mere wallowing in pain, or is it a way to come to grips with our grief? Hence, the national obsession (over in these parts anyway, Bar) on this so-called "closure."

We'd have to pore over book after book on psychology to find the answer, yet this very short and succinct piece of verse of yours speaks volumes.

Well, a visceral answer I hear from most people suffering a recent bereavement is 1/they want to go too, 2/suffering kind of gives them a "contact" with the lost ones... but of course, the subject is complex and so very individual for each person.

Thank you Auntie to have stopped here and read this work. Warm regards, Bar

[Haunted]

Its tormenting to read, it's such an achievement Bar.

In my own interpretation there is always a great deal of "attraction" for one to go after a lost loved one.

[Bar22do]

Delta, ea, Hawk, paperleaves, so sorry I have omitted to thank you for your comments!!!! I was sure I did straight away! and only now noticed I did not... apologies again.

Thank you Haunted as well!

Best to you,

Bar

[ucello]

Again,
her scream pierces the calm
and tears the desert
in shreds.

She roams torrid stretches,
urging dust to blind,
wind to hurl,
ravens to crush her,

where his fingers clung,
briefly resisting the abyss,
before his body hit the rocks
that surged beneath.

Another: a loss poem. Vivid, scalpel sharp. Stopped my breathing.

[ShadowsCool]

Nothing much I can add but echo the thoughts of others on here.

Great job.

Shadows

[Bar22do]

Thank you ucello and shadowscool, I'm so pleased you (retrieved and) enjoyed my recent offering.
Why "another", ucello?

[DocHeart]

Exceptional.

[Bar22do]

Glad you loved it, Doc. Best to you.