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the facade
06-27-2011, 06:52 PM
Never will be the same

When on a second
encounter i find
that my grandfather
clock has died,

and the pendulum pulls
spaghetti stunts,
and instead of chirping
welcoming good mornings

the birds batter
in epileptic chatter,
the microwave's timer
clinks and clanks

a symphony,
cacophony,
light languishes and leans
into acrobatic fits
of shadowy summersaults
(but i will file them in vaults),

Then- who is to say,
I am the happy genius of my household?

everyadventure
06-27-2011, 07:47 PM
Epileptic chatter! :D

Delta40
06-27-2011, 09:53 PM
lol. epileptic chatter? In my experience, they nearly bite off their own tongues but I'm being pedantic.

I do like the pendulum pulling spaghetti stunts. great image

hallaig
06-28-2011, 10:10 AM
I like this, it deserves a lot more attention. Some very arresting images, eg

and the pendulum pulls
spaghetti stunts,

'light languishes and leans
into acrobatic fits '

epileptic chatter

I would ditch the 'batter' which seems there just to provide a bit of a jarring rhyme with 'chatter'. Though I like the 'light..acrobatic fits' part, the last 6 lines don't gell with the rest. You have this clever establishing of discordant noise, but then the poem seems to slide off into a partly incomprehensible ending.