Romance in A Minor

[IceM]

We sat together,
sipping strawberry wine.
A candle flickered on the mahogany table
as the April rain,
unevenly tapping the shingled roof,
accompanied our relaxed sighs.

I reached for your hand,
only to have it playfully pushed
upwards onto your breasts.

We then danced on the pine floors.
Your lips were smooth like great sex
and tasted like fresh cream,
matching the bed linens you slowly led me towards.

Your fingers deftly unbuttoned my shirt,
a wet finger tracing the space between my breasts.

You began your descent,
the thin zip from my pants
signaling the beginning...

...only to be rudely interrupted
by the audience's applause
as the pianist took her bow.

[everyadventure]

Feels like one of those espionage movies where you have to keep altering your perspective of the facts in order to keep up...

First I thought a man and woman were sitting down at the dinner table...but then they were dancing... and then I was thrown off by pondering her lips that match the bedding (or do the bed linens taste like fresh cream?)

But then, it seems it's TWO women ("between MY breasts"-- unless that's a typo) so I've reconfigured this scenario again... and just when I think I'm on the right track, it turns out it's a musical score?

Did I end up in the right place? Whew.

[IceM]

Two things: I struggled to connect the color of cream, which the lady's lips tasted like, to the cream-colored linen. I didn't want to repeat cream twice in the same stanza.

2) I don't know what the guy's word for breasts is. Pectorals, or pecs, sound like a meathead.

Thank you for reading!

[everyadventure]

2) made me laugh my head off! :D

[MystyrMystyry]

I have to agree - I was sent into a dream of all possible configurations. But I was thinking are these like at a restaurant, or at an orgy party? What!

[IceM]

Romance in A Minor is actually the name of a piano concerto. It was listening to this that I found sudden inspiration.

I'll take it as a success that you've all felt the sensation of being in a dream. Other than that, I thought it was a linear moment of sipping wine, then dancing, then getting ready to have sex, but the dream is ended by the applause.

It seems I'll put this one in the "Projects" notebook. I'll need to fine-tune this one.

Thank you all for reading!

[Hawkman]

A piano concerto without a climax? Can't be Rachmaninoff then :)

[Jerrybaldy]

My thoughts very much followed EA's.
It is an issue, men do not have breasts (except the larger men who have what are known here as moobs).
Thinking about it that gap in the middle of your chest is sure to have a name.
Great poem though Ice, I knew you would not see this sex scene through but I had to smile in your choice of interruption, which wiped out the readers expectation to that point.

[everyadventure]

Nobody EVER follows a sex scene through here. Dang, it's like being 16 all over again. ;)