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MystyrMystyry
06-20-2011, 07:31 PM
i am the Midnight Nightmare
Welcome to my night-time fright
Yes i am who you think i am
Saint of Satan
The Botherer
The Lurker in cupboards
The Creeping Unsleeper beneath your bed

Don't enter that unlit room
Don't go into your garden at night
i am always here
Always gazing
Staring
Glaring
Ever ready to pounce when you turn your back
And i'll be coming for you in your sleep

i am the Gentleman of Nightmare
Who you see stirring the pots
But never my face
My secret eyes that glaze in the ultraviolet
My determined jaw and bone-white teeth
But never a smile

Just peer through the darkness

Peering at you

Twota
06-20-2011, 07:45 PM
Spoooky , i love it =D , aint gonna sleep tonight tho D=

AuntShecky
06-21-2011, 01:04 PM
The description of "Mr. Bogus" aka "The Bogeyman" (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Bogeyman) looks official enough to be scribbled on a police blotter.

Those of us in the good ol' U.S. of A. are quite familiar with this nemesis, except over here we refer to him as either
the "Life Insurance Salesman" or, more commonly, "The
Student Loan Collector."

everyadventure
06-21-2011, 03:11 PM
"Creeping unsleeper" is a fantastically original line. Oooo!

MystyrMystyry
06-22-2011, 03:31 AM
Thanks Twota - I wasn't sure how spooky it would come over, I just wanted to try to give a voice to the personality


Thankyou Aunty - I thought you were going to refer to the other nemesises - I wrote this after a news-free weekend and was really only thinking of The Bogieman in vague abstraction - honest


Thanks every - I tried to avoid cliches and even removed virtually a whole stanza that was too full of 'skulking in the shadows' type lines, and also not be overt in Mr Bogus' ultimate mischief

Jerrybaldy
06-22-2011, 06:11 PM
I didn't find it spooky MM, you said you wanted to give 'it' a voice and you did. Your own unique voice.

MystyrMystyry
06-22-2011, 07:00 PM
Thanks JB - I was going to write a book about the character once, including his punishments. The boy who doesn't clean up his room doesn't have to and ends up unable to leave it surrounded floor to ceiling with stuff in a great maze; the one who wants to eat ice-cream instead of dinner gets spoonfed the stuff until he's infinitely sick; the one who doesn't want to sleep gets his eyelids propped open by matchsticks and forced to watch latenight telemarketing, etc etc

Maybe I'll do it in a poem...

everyadventure
06-22-2011, 09:05 PM
Late night infomercials... they always start out so ridiculous, but by the end, I'm somehow convinced I need those rubber ear warmers, or the 12-in-1 juicer...

MystyrMystyry
06-28-2011, 02:23 AM
I just find them really aggressive, and see what's on the ad-free channel and watch it whatever it is - preferably a movie, but sometimes lawnbowls (the only game more tedious than golf) and more occasionally it might be an interesting science program

jajdude
06-28-2011, 07:41 AM
Good stuff MM. Nothing will ever beat "In a balloon we sailed to the moon" though, sadly.