Hate

[Twota]

He killed her - my darling,
now i 've that feeling,
it's too evil and powerful,
seeping into my vessel,
like a hypnotic drug..

It started yesterday,
at home - after her funeral,
I cried myself dry,
replaced my liquids with this drug,
and promised her, revenge..

Today, it took all control,
I can read its thoughts,
I can sense the lust for blood,
I can't stop it - or don't want to,
but, will his death be enough?

[MystyrMystyry]

Interesting, but hate is the wrong word - hate implies weakness on the part of the hater, and power on the part of the hatee.

Detesting and despising someone are different from hating someone.

[Twota]

Hmm, you're right , i ll fix it now =D

[winterroom]

I have to say that I disagree.

I felt that that weakness is expressed in this poem - a surrender to something that is not willed or controllable but is frightening and overwhelming, and in the end corrupting.

Only a few times in my life I have experience hate, and fortunately only briefly. If someone I loved had been killed I just know and fear that such a feeling would be inevitable.

Hugh

[Twota]

It's true that i felt weakness , but against my feelings not the one i hate , and well if some1 u love was killed and hope it never happens , but as i said you won't stop because ur inner self will be satisfied as well by revenge , you will support your hatred , or that's what i think :/

[Jack of Hearts]

'Hate' works just fine if you want it to, Twota. A very interesting poem with an overall sense of cohesion.







J

[Twota]

Thanks jack =D glad you like it =]