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zoolane
06-15-2011, 04:52 PM
The Yonder.

The shade of the unexpecting shadow.
Is unedge with the waking shade.
The unrested is the deed coming.
The deed is giving away to a crept.
Ever closer to the blue yonder.
The peach is crowning itself to the shade.
The shadow is gone with a gentle step.
hillwalker
06-16-2011, 07:11 AM
I don't understand this one, zoo, but it still has a certain something about it that makes it a pleasure to read.

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zoolane
06-16-2011, 09:06 AM
The Yonder.

The shade of the unexpecting shadow.
Is unedge with the waking shade.
The unrested is the deed coming.
The deed is giving away to a crept.
Ever closer to the blue yonder.
The peach is crowning itself to the shade.
The shadow is gone with a gentle step.



Shadow = person.
Shade = Surrounding.
Blue yonder = Water.
Peach = Dawn or Sunset.
Buh4Bee
06-16-2011, 08:00 PM
This is lovely, zoo.
Jack of Hearts
06-17-2011, 04:21 AM
It's difficult to understand its meaning, zoo, but this line was very striking:


The peach is crowning itself to the shade.

Come to think of it, its got a good amount of nice imagery going for it.





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billl
06-17-2011, 04:25 AM
Wow, yes, I could go an and on about this one. A very nice surprise, glad I clicked on it.
zoolane
06-17-2011, 03:33 PM
Thank you for comments everyone, I am glad that create imagery but I think you all missed something.


The Yonder.

The unrested is the deed coming.
The deed is giving away to a crept.
Jerrybaldy
06-17-2011, 07:30 PM
I can only think of zombies :)
zoolane
08-07-2011, 05:38 PM
A man commit suicide of a bridge.
Delta40
08-07-2011, 07:14 PM
I like the imagery and symbolism too. Where on earth have you been Zoo?
everyadventure
08-07-2011, 08:28 PM
You've been MISSED! I just mentioned you on a thread the other day, wondering where you'd gotten off to...
Jack of Hearts
08-07-2011, 09:27 PM
Re-reading this imagery was pleasant.








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Bar22do
08-08-2011, 06:49 AM
One has to decipher this and make one's own meaning, I guess, though you give your keys, too. It makes it more challenging. A pleasure to read.
zoolane
08-08-2011, 07:02 AM
Thank you all. I have being busy with kids and out control nephew come to stay. Plus my pc has decide to go on strike again so only 1 pc and laptop worked.

I have missed being online and try being on bit more. Crossed your fingers everyone.
PrinceMyshkin
08-08-2011, 09:59 AM
One can work to decipher this (with the clues that you kindly provided) or one can simply relax and enjoy the energy and mystery of it. Well done!
firefangled
08-08-2011, 08:35 PM
Making this so cryptic is a great way to elicit the usual confusion surrounding this "deed." There is always a mystery to a suicide...it a personal and impersonal act simultaneously. Well done.