Pearl

[Twota]

He is a middle-aged man ,
single and has always been this way ,
he lives in the countryside ,
he is all alone , except for his cat and books ,
Pearl , she is a pretty albino ,
she's his best friend and his lover ,
of course , she doesn't talk much ,
but she's a perfect listener...

Daily , she crawls into his bed ,
wakes him up , with a lovely kiss ,
his closed eyes smile along with his mouth ,
stretches his arms , shaking the sleep off ,
like a wet bird in a hot summer's day ,
shaking the water off his feather , in delight ,
then , he opens his eyes and laughs ,
she miaows and jumps into his arms...


It's the week end , couldn't be better...
the sun in the sky , its warm and breezy ,
he sits on his rocking chair with a new friend to read ,
he finishes it and gazes at the sun set ,
a golden disk sinking into the green extension ,
he thinks about his lonely life and sheds a tear...


It's dark now and the breeze went cold ,
his bare feet on the wooden floor are freezing ,
his body is shivering by cold and sadness ,
but suddenly , the blood warmth returns to his feet ,
and runs into his body like an antivenom ,
surprised at the sudden change , he looked down..
on his feet Pearl lay and sweetly said Miaow..

[hillwalker]

Nice story - and I liked a couple of lines in the second verse

shaking the sleep off ,
like a wet bird in a hot summer's day ,
shaking the water off his feather , in delight

but it's mostly prose chopped up into a poem shape isn't it?
This could just as easily be written as a paragraph of prose.

I also think the change from present tense to past tense in the closing two lines is unnecessary.

H

[Twota]

Hmm , glad you like the story and the lines =D but i wrote it to be a poem n it ends up to be prose? :/ Just like the last verse in the previous poem , how can i maintain the poem form or firstly create it ?

[hillwalker]

Read poetry - read prose. If you can't see the difference maybe you should concentrate on writing short pieces of prose.

H

[Twota]

Hmm , oki hope i ll see the difference =D

[NoRule]

Twota,

I enjoyed this a lot! Your poem made me really sad, though, because it made me miss my puppy which I had adopted almost a year ago and then had to move away from. Iggi Pup is her name, I miss her :(

NoRule

[Twota]

Aww. I am glad you enjoyed it , and i am sorry for Iggi Pup :/ i am an animal lover , cats and dogs specially =]