Hollow

[alcala0001]

I lose more of myself each day
A sack of flour that's host to ravenous insects
I eat, tasting only ashes in my mouth
I talk, not caring about the words that exit my lips
So this purgatory
Limbo
Passing through the day, a shadow among ghosts
No direction
A dried, skeletal leaf in a current
Drifting wherever
My mind is numb
Thoughts dark
Please, anything but you
I'm a goldfish, lidless eyes unable to blink or look away
Staring at your face
Unable to shut you out
Time heals all wounds
Each moment is agony
Without you




Thanks for reading. Poetry isn't really my thing, so please forgive my informal style. Suggestions are welcome.

[hillwalker]

This isn't terribly original, but having said that it's quite good.

You should, however, consider removing 'Time heals all wounds' - it's a tired cliche and doesn't seem to fit the conclusion the poem is aiming at - that time does not heal all wounds.

H

[alcala0001]

Thanks for your criticism! I knew it was well-trod territory when I wrote it, but I will strive to go a bit off the path next time. :)