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Delta40
06-10-2011, 08:42 PM
Our wedding vows could not catch
the clouds moving briskly to the east.
Domestic fuel emissions spewed out
like victorian chimney stacks at a cotton mill
but I continue to raise my eyes upwards.

Surely even now, mankind
secretly hopes one day, they might
bounce up and down on the billowy whiteness,
given a simple child-like chance.
Not so for the grounded historian.

Blessedly, on Earth all things are renewed.
I giggle as I hiccup on a word
Shakespeare farted out in 1559
and throw keys against the wall knowing
the 9000 year old plaster from Anatolia
will survive after I have turned to dust.

Sometimes though I wonder why I feel so locked out.

Nathan's carnal lust spills over an 1830's print,
his magnifying glass inspecting the intricate stitch.
I'm quite certain Mrs Hutchinson is not a first edition
I wisely know so few women are and passively
slop tea into his saucer as I sit by his side.

Silently I urge him to leave the classics.
Disgusted with all women, he slurps the brew.
You always over sugar my tea!
I coyly drape myself in our silk lined curtains.
Darling do look up and revel in Gods nebulous sky.

Nay, says he and fingers the forgery like a whore.
I kneel at his slippered feet and ask why,
knowing all too well his world weary reply
O, that way madness lies; let me shun that;
No more of that
I linger over the setting sun, sigh then draw the curtains.

Under lamplight, my brow creases as 5000 pieces
of clear blue sky perplex my aura of normality.
By jove! I do believe I hold The Secret of Mary.
That's nice dear. I patiently connect the corners,
edges, all the bits to create an unabridged version of the sky.

First Editions. They matter not to me
when the jigsaw puzzle of life remains incomplete.
Nathan spits a Wollstonecraft sliver from his teeth.
...a steady purpose - a point on which the soul may fix its intellectual eye

I absorb the full picture then scrutinize my husband.
There really is nothing of interest to see after all.
I stroke the vellum which he holds precious.
He beams like a child bouncing on a cloud
and he adoringly worships my parting words,
'tis true, 'tis true 'tis pity,
With no clouds in the sky tis all just blue.

MystyrMystyry
06-10-2011, 11:45 PM
That's great Delta - there's so many good lines and images it's hard to pick out just a few

It's funny in a George and Mildred kind of way

Mildred: 'Oh hullo - what are you up to?'
Young tenants: 'Oh hi - we're just going out to a dance.'
Mildred: 'Ooh dancing... Did you hear that George? They're going dancing - just like we used to when we were alive...'

Well done again Delta

tailor STATELY
06-10-2011, 11:59 PM
Wow. Still enjoying.

So rich... Need to savour and study all the more.

Especially enjoying: "Our wedding vows could not catch
the clouds moving briskly to the east." / "5000 pieces
of clear blue sky" / "With no clouds in the sky tis all just blue." and more with the clouds and puzzles mixed throughout. printing out to aid my study.

Best regards,
tailor STATELY

Hawkman
06-11-2011, 03:45 AM
An engaging narrative, Delta. I'm not sure about "...mankind from one to hundred..." as it's a bit clumsy and I think the line world work without the bold section.

Regrettably, I have a loathing for the word, "normalcy" preferring, "normality" (it has a much nicer rhythm ;) ) Do you really live in a house with 9000 year old Anatolian plaster? Lucky you :D

Seriously though, it is a very good poem and paints a picture of the scene very effectively.

Live and be well - H

Delta40
06-11-2011, 03:49 AM
How would you suggest I write:

Surely even now, mankind from one to hundred

Is it not true that mankind through every age?

Hawkman
06-11-2011, 04:11 AM
I'm not sure that you really need to say, "from one to hundred" which should be, a or one hundred anyway, and as a subordinate clause, be delimited with commas. If you really feel you need to emphasise this point why not just say "at any age".

"Surely even now, mankind
secretly hopes one day, they might
bounce up and down on the billowy whiteness,
given a simple child-like chance.
Not so for the grounded historian."

I think flows better though. It's only a suggestion, Delta.
Best, H

Delta40
06-11-2011, 04:34 AM
I'm always willing to listen to a man who watches the birds.....

zoolane
06-11-2011, 05:33 AM
It lovely poem, under impression that woman watch her husband doing jigsaw puzzle or experince while really he suppose and drank tea with her.

Delta40
06-11-2011, 11:50 AM
Thanks Zoo. It got a little complicated as I wrote it (lord knows how it came about) but I took care to place some literary clues here and there.

zoolane
06-11-2011, 05:34 PM
Thanks Zoo. It got a little complicated as I wrote it (lord knows how it came about) but I took care to place some literary clues here and there.

Shakespeare's wife or Hmm Mary Of Scots for some reason I think I am closer with Shakespeare.

Delta40
06-11-2011, 07:13 PM
Shakespeare
Mrs Hutchinson by Nathan Hawthorne
The Secret of Mary by Louis-Marie Grignion De Montfort
Mary Wollstonecraft

A dull piece of a jigsaw puzzle composed entirely of blue sky.

Jerrybaldy
06-11-2011, 08:07 PM
Is it okay to say I havent a ****ing clue but I love reading you ?

Delta40
06-11-2011, 08:13 PM
Is it okay to say I havent a ****ing clue but I love reading you ?

It is alright by me Jerry :smilewinkgrin:

tailor STATELY
06-11-2011, 08:27 PM
My bit of study missed on "Mrs Hutchinson" by Nathan Hawthorne. My only bump into Nathaniel Hawthorne was upon reading "The Scarlet Letter", oh so many years ago. What I found about a Mary Hutchinson was only a tiny bit referenced from an article on William Wordsworth;when she married William she became self-effacing, or did not/no longer drew attention to herself, (which reminded me of your new signature).

A swing and a miss for me on "The Secret of Mary". I'll have to remedy this.

What I learned about Mary Wollenstone was amazing and tragic.

The changes you have made in you avatar and sig appear to be in tune with this poem.

Overall, a fine poem richly woven with expert touch. And more to study !

Sincerely,
tailor STATELY

Delta40
06-11-2011, 08:32 PM
Thank you Tailor. You're more learned than I but I have always admired the mother of Mary Shelley.