Boots Caked With Mud

[Atehequa]

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Not too wordy now, is it ?

[G L Wilson]

Spot on.

[Buh4Bee]

This has substance, but at times I found it a tad too wordy. Maybe the rhyme?

Otherwise, it is a decent read.

[everyadventure]

Your best lines were: "By somber clad poets, boots caked with mud" and "Our words drop and slither from dark boughs above." But the entire fourth stanza fell flat with predictable syntax. I'd love to see that one reworked; see if you can surprise us :)

[PrinceMyshkin]

Yes, it all works but there was an over-riding feeling, for me, of an author who was a touch too conscious all the way through that he was writing a capital "p" Poem and was mindful not to let anything get out of hand. I haven't read your other submissions yet but will, hoping for something that challenges or even escapes your severe control.

[Atehequa]

Yes, it all works but there was an over-riding feeling, for me, of an author who was a touch too conscious all the way through that he was writing a capital "p" Poem and was mindful not to let anything get out of hand. I haven't read your other submissions yet but will, hoping for something that challenges or even escapes your severe control.

Just an occasional urge to go beyond ambiguously stilted.

[doingitagain]

i see the poem as meta. it is a good work, prideful in its knowledge of true work, but that's the ironic twist.

[Delta40]

I have been absent and have missed the poem. I hope you didn't remove it because you're not happy with the responses