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Atehequa
06-04-2011, 12:38 PM
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tailor STATELY
06-05-2011, 01:28 AM
LOL

Verse 3 seems to be forced; and takes your poem from light to whimsy - which is fine if that's where you wanted to go, but rather caught me off guard. Perhaps by v3 you had already fallen off the wagon ?

Welcome to Litnet btb.

Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
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Atehequa
06-05-2011, 02:38 AM
LOL

Verse 3 seems to be forced; and takes your poem from light to whimsy - which is fine if that's where you wanted to go, but rather caught me off guard. Perhaps by v3 you had already fallen off the wagon ?

Welcome to Litnet btb.

Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY

Greetings and my thanks for your welcome.

Light to whimsy was my intentions upon writing this. I figured it would be a good poem to start off with here.
G L Wilson
06-05-2011, 03:25 AM
The end is a ripper, a real surprise.
Buh4Bee
06-05-2011, 08:10 AM
A nice contrast to your last poem. I very much like the fanciful world, even if you need to be drunk or to use a paper bag. Hahha!
Atehequa
06-05-2011, 10:24 AM
A nice contrast to your last poem. I very much like the fanciful world, even if you need to be drunk or to use a paper bag. Hahha!

Ahhhh, there is a story behind that poem. It was her who had to drink me into a better looking person. There was a small paper bag, but that held the bottle we shared.