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white camellia
06-01-2011, 12:59 AM
Your overwelming kindness
always grabs me

Philosophy is not a refuge
against your spell

I start beheaded
with expressive impulses

As we fall
by the immediate ourselves

Doralace
06-01-2011, 09:23 AM
A nice vignette, as I read it. I love it very much.

PrinceMyshkin
06-01-2011, 10:57 AM
I'm not sure I understand the final couplet but the modest dignity of every part of this is very compelling - and it's good to see you back here after what seems to me to have been a lengthy absence.

_Shannon_
06-01-2011, 11:07 AM
I love the sparsity of the language. I especially love:

"Philosophy is not a refuge
against your spell"

white camellia
06-08-2011, 08:46 PM
Thanks for your comments, Doralace and Shannon. Glad you love it in a way.

PrinceMyshkin: not hard to see the difficulty of understanding the last couplet - I've cut a lot from the original piece. I used "You" and "I" as alternatives of oneself. I haven't written poetry for quite a while. It's a rework on the one done last year.