Here is the thing

[Jerrybaldy]

Here is the thing,
the thing is…
You knew I wouldn’t tell you the thing just then.
You iron your hair in a vanity mirror,
I watch your twin smile back.
Your hair crackles and burns and straightens,
I see me in your lip gloss.
Here is the thing…
Your cigarette filter
is a greasy arterial red,
you are wrapped in lace
displaying moles
through eczema peep holes.
I buzz your landing strip for laughs,
with the bravado of no libido.
Here is the thing,
the thing is…
I deserve a car wreck
and you, fair lover,
deserve me back.

[Hawkman]

The only thing I can say about this one is that it's very good. It paints a picture and captures a mood and moment very effectively. There is one problematic line though:

"is a greasy artery red"

"a greasy arterial red", would read better, but if you are likening the butt to an artery then, "greasy red artery" would be OK, although I don't like it so well as the former suggestion.

Good poem JB

Live and be well - H

[Jerrybaldy]

I was thinking of the lipstick on the butt and you are right and I will edit. Thanks Hawk.

[MystyrMystyry]

Good stuff JB!

[deryk]

Worthy of nightmares.

I just awoke from one seconds before reading this, and I must say, it actually sustained it perfectly. You've got a talent.

[hillwalker]

A late night vignette masterfully drawn. Elegant and evocative.

H