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imnotanerd
05-25-2011, 12:53 PM
I'm new to the world of literature. I mainly like to write poems that twist the rules (sometimes). I mainly program, but write decent-good poetry when bored. Here is my first work (which is a haiku):

When you leave my hand,
You return with boundless grace,
Like a boomerang.

:D

Calidore
05-25-2011, 05:30 PM
We have a couple of poetry-related forum games you might like: Haiku and Cinquain Chain. In both, you take the last line of the previous poem as the first line of yours. Thus:

Like a boomerang
Both of us, circling around
Unable to meet

deryk
05-25-2011, 08:26 PM
Graceful, but not boundless.
It is a pretty mini-comedy.
Smile.

imnotanerd
05-25-2011, 11:51 PM
Actually, I was looking for more of a critique. :-/

IceM
05-25-2011, 11:58 PM
Boundless grace was a strong image. Not much else to say about the haiku.

deryk
05-26-2011, 12:15 AM
Actually, I was looking for more of a critique. :-/

My haiku was a critique. There isn't much else to say. It's a brief smile.