Delusions Of Genius

[Alexander III]

re-adjustment time

[Jack of Hearts]

Leaves one to conjecture what, exactly, this flower could be. Perhaps youthful ideals, or the self incarnate of the protagonist (can you use 'protagonist' as a term of poetry? This reader is out of his element.)

The confusion between nonchalance and nausea is striking.




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[Alexander III]

Thanks Jack, oh and I don't know if you may use "protagonist" as I term, but I surely understood what you meant and that's what counts.

[Buh4Bee]

about a poet who thinks his genius (flower) is possibly failing him or never existed.

[Delta40]

I think its a poetic reference to recent delusions on Lit-Net. Your genius shines through loud and clear AIII

[deryk]

I confess, this made me think of the fruition of Roman Decadence
despite its overt Greekness.

[yuka]

So, that's not delusions of Genius, but of "Genius".

[Sano]

I confess, this made me think of the fruition of Roman Decadence
despite its overt Greekness.

It made me think of that as well. Great poem! I loved it.

[IceM]

I definitely appreciate the poem. I have some questions/recommendations though.

Why not combine the poem into one stanza? It seems, perhaps, more practical. The first two stanzas, as you have them, relate to one subject, as do the last two stanzas, relating to perhaps an anticipation of this coming day. Perhaps your division was artistic, but the image would have more continuity were it combined.

Also too, why not do away with some of the line breaks? Lines 2 and 5 have caesuras that, if removed, lend a greater flow in the poem. It would read smoother. Perhaps, in relation to combining stanzas, the fusion of the latter two would lend even a greater rhythm (since that extra space slows the tempo minutely).

I cannot contest the image of the poem. Well constructed, and I did enjoy it. Best of luck with poem, and your next writings.

[Alexander III]

I definitely appreciate the poem. I have some questions/recommendations though.

Why not combine the poem into one stanza? It seems, perhaps, more practical. The first two stanzas, as you have them, relate to one subject, as do the last two stanzas, relating to perhaps an anticipation of this coming day. Perhaps your division was artistic, but the image would have more continuity were it combined.

Also too, why not do away with some of the line breaks? Lines 2 and 5 have caesuras that, if removed, lend a greater flow in the poem. It would read smoother. Perhaps, in relation to combining stanzas, the fusion of the latter two would lend even a greater rhythm (since that extra space slows the tempo minutely).

I cannot contest the image of the poem. Well constructed, and I did enjoy it. Best of luck with poem, and your next writings.


You are right that combining it into one stanza would add much sped to the pome and flow, but regarding the topic of the poem and it's reliance upon strong and separate images, by rendering the poem quicker and more flowing I think the images would become less distinct and would begin to mesh with one another, also this is a poem which comes slowly as if it became quick it would become ugly.

In regards to the line-breaks I think you may have a point, fussing lines together might make it stronger, I shall tinker around and see if I can make it work.

As always thanks to you and everyone for their comments