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Delta40
05-08-2011, 05:07 AM
You're like that old green cardigan
I had as a child. Did I knit it or was it you?
I remember I wore it anytime I felt cold.
It took a while for me to do the buttons up by myself.
but once you showed me, my fumbling fingers
tried their best to imitate your manicured hands.
Over the years, it frayed, candy floss stuck to the cuffs
and you threw it away but I saved the buttons.
Each one had come loose for its own reason.
Caught on the gate when I raced home in the rain
Chewed off by a naughty kitten.
Twisted free when I started a new school.
As they dropped off, I placed them in a jar
of meaningful odds and ends.
A two pence piece, a rose quartz stone, a broken chain.
They each tell a story like an unreconciled key.
Once my child prised the lid loose and they scattered across the table
onto the floor.
Somewhere in the far corner, between my own childhood memories
I found her tiny milk teeth.
Tears flowed. Joyous, sad, content.
Now my young daughter tries to knit a bolero jacket
but she fumbles, drops the stitches, loses patience.
Finally, she throws the needles down and exclaims: I give up!
While she sleeps, I fill in the holes, knit more rows
until one day she marvels over her creation.
I sewed it together with those three brown buttons.
Now, I am like that old green cardigan.
She can wear it anytime she feels cold.

Jack of Hearts
05-08-2011, 01:20 PM
Though this reader lacks the maternal instinct to fully appreciate this poem, he can appreciate your articulate nature and the curiously amusing use of 'naughty kittens' who chew off buttons.





J

Delta40
05-08-2011, 05:38 PM
I was feeling a bit cheesy n' all yesterday. I really did stop and smell the roses for a change!

Hawkman
05-09-2011, 03:23 AM
I thought this one was a marvellous illustration of a sense of famillial continuity with a generous seasoning of sentiment, but not in a gushing or cheesy way. Doesn't everyone have a button box?

Really enjoyed it, Delta.

Live long and prosper - H

AuntShecky
05-10-2011, 02:31 PM
A conceit of two garments, a cardigan sweater and a bolero jacket combine to represent nostalgia and maternal care. (The latter is often applied secretly and as is the case in this one, while the daughter sleeps, often goes unappreciated.) Reading between the lines we can detect the thread of familial continuity, from daughter to mother to daughter. Maybe the distaff of Wordsworth's "The child is father to the man."

Only one thing bothers me about this piece is that you are usually pretty good with free verse, but this one strikes me as a little prose-y, maybe more "telling" than "showing" especially in the opening lines.

Maybe something could be done with the line breaks and/or rhythmically, in a way mimicking the clicking of needles, or even the cadence of a bolero. I couldn't tell you how --I'm not a musician---

But I did see the movie, "10"!

Delta40
05-10-2011, 05:13 PM
Thanks for your comments. Its just cheesy mother day stuff really.