First approach!

[Wendy M]

Driving in to the valley
Scenery is breathtaking
As the mountains emerge
My heart feels heavy with

A sense of melancholy,
Knowing that this visit is
Only temporary; but also
A feeling of nostalgia as we

Approach into Chamonix,
The massif of Mont Blanc
Appears huge, glistening
In the sunshine, Celestial;

Winding the window down
On the car, the air hits me,
So fresh, intoxicates the
Lungs! Gush of adrenaline!

[hillwalker]

Now you've got rid or rhyme perhaps it's time to look at your line-breaks (or indeed why you have split this into 4-line verses).

Ending v.1 with the word 'with' just makes no sense - it's not even a safe place to end a line let alone a verse.
Line breaks are meant to give readers a signal to pause for the slightest breath before moving on. The line itself acting as a single step in a series that combine to build up to a journey if you like - the line break signifying when to lift your foot up. Obviously 'with a sense of melancholy' would work better as a line on its own.

Similarly 'as we approach' and 'intoxicates the lungs' should not be split up the way you have here.

Parts of this are good but there's still a sense that you're not sure what you would like the reader to focus on. Is it the views or the narrator's heavy heart - or indeed the window on the car?

This poem has potential but there were rather too many banal distractions. We can only follow your clues - it's up to you to pick out those elements you feel are important enough to share with us. Sometimes you have to be ruthless - but knowing what to leave out is as important as what to put in.

H

[Wendy M]

Actually you are quite right on this, I thought that after posting it up, but could not be bothered to come and take it off and work on it, but I will do over the weekend and see how it goes, their is a few changes and more I would of like to add to it, but I was tired and had lost interest in it after! Yes, thank you Hillwalker for your sound advice, I will look at it and this time your advice is what I wished for....

Also remember,,,,,You are obviously of experience, so give me time to work all this out!