Bin Liner

[MystyrMystyry]

At the final moment

Hides behind a girl

No hero it proves

To her unspoken world

And when was asked

Do you quit? Or not?

A coward's yellow eye

Before the lonely shot


More lines deserved?

No, but it might be

Let's all shout aloud

Good riddance malignancy


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[Skia]

Shark food is a understatement.
Brilliant poem MM,
Loved it. The last few minutes of the leader of death and destruction told in a contstructive and powerful way.

Though said, Bin Liner does not deserve to be in one of your poems, they show too much beauty.

P.S... More lines be deserved? - Your lines of poetry? No. It's already been given enough.

[IceM]

Your poem was beautiful. It captured a magnificent moment in history--killing America's most dangerous threat--in a magnificent way.

Although I know you meant to criticize him--the "sharkfood" comment--I feel like your poem makes bin Laden seem heroic. Now, in no means do I support the fellow, but his ability to essentially "look [Death] in the eye" suggests an undying acceptance of his fate, which is courageous. Like I said, I know that wasn't your intention--the use of a human shield was cruel, and his actions were terrible. Yet there seems something heroic in the way his death his portrayed...

Wonderful poem nonetheless.

[qimissung]

Perhaps it's simply the fact that he wrote about him, in a poem, where he is the only character. It does kinda make him stand out.


A good effort, nevertheless, MM. Clever title, too.

[MystyrMystyry]

Fixed it

You're right - It did read awkwardly - I was trying to incorporate more that it merited