Dwindling Light

[Delta40]

One score year must pass
before a decade can be understood.
So come, take sanctuary by the inglenook.
This kindled blaze of imagination,
which would craft reveries of flight
at the hearth of poetic dwellings,
dwindles.
Must we only ever gleam as bright
as the grate we refuse to polish?
Such burgeoning wings will surely shun
the caliginous surround until even oracles admit
nobody rests until they are dead.

[Delta40]

Sock Puppet says: bumpity bump

[Jerrybaldy]

I have read this several times and clueless for a while I am now seeing OBL but in a non political way, of course.

[Delta40]

Sock Puppet says: you're right.

[Jerrybaldy]

sock puppet is a very unpolitical poet I have heard said

[Hawkman]

This is an interesting and thought provoking poem Delta, but I'm thrown by the first 2 lines. They seem not to gel with the main body of the text. They would appear to introduce a poem about temporal reflection and then the poem mulls over the awareness of the nature of creativity. You might consider dropping the intro, or expanding it so that it leads more coherently into the main theme. Perhaps tying the concept of dwindling creativity more clearly with the passage of time could be enhanced by returning to it at the end. I think it might be the specifics of "One score" and "Decade" that beg the question, why?

Live and be well- H

[Delta40]

you might be right. It is only in hindsight that we appreciate a decade or understand it. I said we need one score years before that can really happen. I tried to add OBL as a character in the thread why are leaders evil? but was told it is too emotive right now and we need approx 30 years before it can be discussed in a more detached way. Hence the opening line. 2011 is the first year of that score. 19 more to go.

I wrote it in a hurry.

[Delta40]

Do other Lit-nutters find that pieces of work they hold as a personal favourite are sometimes (often) the least reviewed? I rather like this poem without having to expand on it further - mainly because it sits well with me and encompasses the moment in which I penned it.

Anyone else have similar experiences?

[Jerrybaldy]

I agree Delta. maybe you should start a thread in the poetry games section ..

[IceM]

I feel like I fully understood the poem, and how true you are, especially with the first two lines, which rightfully assert that time will assess the past.

My favorite lines, easily, are these:

This kindled blaze of imagination,
which would craft reveries of flight
at the hearth of poetic dwellings,
dwindles.

With relatively efficient word use, you capture a complex thought. That's laudable, and something I'm trying to capture myself. Well done.

[Delta40]

Thanks IceM. I'm glad you see the wisdom of the opening lines.

[tailor STATELY]

This is a clever bit of poetry.

Dwellings dwindle - I love alliteration when used this well.


Do other Lit-nutters find that pieces of work they hold as a personal favourite are sometimes (often) the least reviewed?
LOL. Call me paranoid. When it happens to me I feel that everyone has pegged the IGNOR button on me for a time. "Vanity of vanities, all is vanity." - Moe Howard.

Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY

[Delta40]

This is a clever bit of poetry.

Dwellings dwindle - I love alliteration when used this well.


LOL. Call me paranoid. When it happens to me I feel that everyone has pegged the IGNOR button on me for a time. "Vanity of vanities, all is vanity." - Moe Howard.

Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY

Phew! For a while there I thought it was just me. Don't worry, you're not alone

[MystyrMystyry]

As an experiment put up something intentionally awful and see what happens, show-off Delta

[Delta40]

As an experiment put up something intentionally awful and see what happens, show-off Delta

lol what do you mean intentionally awful?

[IceM]

LOL. Call me paranoid. When it happens to me I feel that everyone has pegged the IGNOR button on me for a time.

I get this fear often too. Whenever I post something, I get scared that what I posted may have been so poor as to not even warrant a comment.

Patience, I suppose, would be useful?


lol what do you mean intentionally awful?

I'm sure--and this is purely complimentary--with the readership and consistent record of wonderful poems, even your garbage would still have a beauty found in it.