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DistortedMemory
04-26-2011, 09:44 PM
I've found this old poem amongst others when I started drafting notes for work during school years, never got submitted but I've looked over it and revised a few things, so here it is, go easy. It's called 'Reflections'.

I've cut my name into my face
Because
Sometimes I forget it
Because
Sometimes I want to forget it
Because
Sometimes I despise it.

I've cut my name deep
Because
Sometimes it will remind me
But only when I want to see it.

(A note on the title, it was 'Mirrors', but I changed it to 'Reflections' based on the idea of seeing one's self in a reflection, like a mirror but also reflecting on one's self as a person in thinking. So I've tried to spice up that part).

Delta40
04-26-2011, 10:16 PM
Stop prefacing your work. Without realising it, you set the reader up for potential disappointment :-)

I like the turnaround quality and I imagine when he sees his own reflection, his name will be the wrong way round which should capture how he feels very nicely.

DistortedMemory
04-26-2011, 11:00 PM
Stop prefacing your work. Without realising it, you set the reader up for potential disappointment :-)

I like the turnaround quality and I imagine when he sees his own reflection, his name will be the wrong way round which should capture how he feels very nicely.

:P Aright

And yeah I wanted this persona to be a really confused individual who doesn't like who he is and so physically scars his face, the one thing which would really be the most unique feature and so almost like if he forgets what he feels bad about, he will be constantly reminded by the scar in his face, the name is more of a symbolic metaphor as well as taking the line "Dishonouring your name" to a new level XP So in essence, it's like a very overpowering method of self-harm, mentally and physically.

Thanks for the feedback:)