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Biggus
04-15-2011, 04:16 AM
KISS NUMBER ONE

The first nervous kiss,
When tentative
And hesitant lips
Lacking confidence
Lacking conviction
Miss their mark
And teeth collide

KISS NUMBER TWO

The second kiss
More eagerly awaited
Full of conviction
Yet over confident
Hearts race unchecked
When over eager lips
Engage like spaceships docking
And both parties forget to breathe

KISS NUMBER THREE

The third kiss
Is eager yet restrained
Slow yet purposeful
And when lips meet
Hearts start racing
But each moment is savoured
This kiss, though not life changing
Will be remembered

MorpheusSandman
04-15-2011, 05:27 AM
With the tri-part structure this plays almost like an elegant little ode. I love the image of the docking spaceships in the second stanza. It overall reaffirms the "third times' the charm" notion, which actually has more of a basis in fact than most would suspect.

Biggus
04-15-2011, 11:40 AM
Thank you most kindly

everyadventure
04-15-2011, 02:05 PM
Why did this poem make me wistful? Perhaps because I long ago had my last "first" kiss!

Biggus
04-16-2011, 07:32 AM
I had to trawl my memory banks as well.
Paul