Embroiled.

[zoolane]

Embroiled.


Embroiled in their passion, as time stood for no man in their position of two people who love each but can not being together. The society they live in will not allow it, its supposedly to be out law in modern world. Yet society is allowing crime to soar out of control, with virtual world taking over and sabotaging people brains. So that people can no longing tell difference between reality and not reality.

In hotel, where weekly meeting take place of the book clubs but only classic authors are alllow to be discuss not ones see to go against the grain of the modern world. You get all types there, all sexes as well. The rules are unspoken but as all members must obey them. This only time they have to see each and re acquittance to each others passion. To set their own private world light in their minds without it being in scrutinize.

Each hand waffles over smooth but rough apart of his inner thigh, tenderly kisses very inch of one chest, then other have a turn. The hot water raining down on them, steam up the glass shower panel. The phone rings, which remind them that so little time left to feed on each other desires. Slam go the door, leave scented love letter on the pillow.



I am not sure going more to story or not.

[zoolane]

From opposite side of society the pair came from, was obvious to all in-circle, one member seem not to be with them tonight in question. Lots of rumors were going round the special place. Reality is that he told wrong person and was taken in the dead of night to a disclosure place. The secret police had spies in unusual places but they were there. The rules have being broke when news of an arrest was leak to the hotel by phone call. Notes was swift pass round the hotel or put under door and quick knock. Slow the hotel was getting emptied.

He left just after PM, clutch on to his love letter as he cross road, try avoid the unsavory characters on the corner. Suddenly he was tapping on the shoulder by child who put out warrant card. Two more olded children came and held tight by his arms lead him way to van. Sharp object was push to his skin, liquid slush through his vein. John woke to find himself tied to a chair in a country cottage. John only wear his underwear but with brand tattoo imprinted on his chest said"I AM GAY".

[hillwalker]

Wow, this is creepy on all sorts of levels. It's a little like '1984' but having the children act as law enforcers reminds one of the Hitler Youth. And as for having the scenario revolve around a book club puts one in mind of Ray Bradbury's 'Fahrenheit 451' where of course books themselves are forbidden.

This is another step forward in your journey as a writer - really looking forward to more.

H

[zoolane]

Wow, this is creepy on all sorts of levels. It's a little like '1984' but having the children act as law enforcers reminds one of the Hitler Youth. And as for having the scenario revolve around a book club puts one in mind of Ray Bradbury's 'Fahrenheit 451' where of course books themselves are forbidden.

This is another step forward in your journey as a writer - really looking forward to more.

H

The only book you mention which I tried reading was '1984' but could not get into for some reason. I heard of Ray Bradbury and the book to.
When I started this piece pure because item on TV programmer I saw this morning and hopeful I will carry on the creepy feel throughout.

[paperastronaut]

i like this a lot, and i agree with hill that having the kids as the enforcers really adds some extra coolness to the story...

nice work

[zoolane]

John came startle realization his dark inner most fear have come true, that small they are dangerous their bound to become. In front of him, stood blemishs fill the boy face with crate that could only filled with polyfill. With line of red going thought his dry black hair with gold rimmer metal frame glasses. First thing John notice is that he wear a badge with 'SE' with little set of handcuffs.

Boy shout in strong stern voice ' TO FEET YOUR FAGOT' . Sharp bringing his to heels together as his was a solider.

Shiver when up and down John spine, he try do as he as told but fingers were free. John thumbs were not, they in thumb lock with girl of maybe five years of age turn screw.

[Delta40]

this is creepy and like Hill says because of the children. They have boundless potential and nobody is quite sure what is going on in their minds since life is not etched in their faces.

[zoolane]

John thought if only I had pencil, I could play dot to dot. A snap sound came from his hand.

"Answer him? I will be sure turn the screw again". The infant whisper in his ear. John eyes roll back in his head, he let out enormous scream. All five children starting laughing and pointing at him.

The door flew door there stand in door way was youngish lady, with blond hair with red line, hazel eyes, pale skin and wear black dress. She to had badge on but this time it had on it 'Judge Orwell'. They stood in line, in a strange order, not by height or age.

Orwell approach John in a rigid manner with sweet smile.
"Get up you homosexual, freak of nature, who should be kill that birth". Her voice was innocent sounding.

With that John was drag to semi stand position.

Then girl who had put his thumb in lock, standing in front of him with clipboard.
"John Allan Poe, you here by charge with treason act 16, 2021. Be part of a book club which discuss non classic authors. The most serious charge of all is of being homosexual which is not toleration in this society. How do you plead?"

He tried to appear with his dignity and some pride which hard to do in his underwear.
"I accept all charges that I am accusation of. I am proud to be Gay and to read and talk about authors, books which do not agree with this society"
He felt thud behind his kneecap as slump back it chair.

[zoolane]

Orwell slaps John's face with a whip from other side of room, nine more times on his chest. John now found himself hang in the air by his wrists, while body is being stretch so his arms supposedly come away from his tor co.

A girl with ginger hair stand in front him with logo of 'SE' and handcuffs on black boil suit. She hold up the lavender scent love letter. She is skinny then average person is. John first thought was of a trip, he went with his school to London Zoo and saw stick insect in golden age.

"I command thee in of this society to name this sub human person who intials are on this letter? Who is A.G?". Her voice remind John of TV set he was were volume would jump up and down.

John point blank refuse to name the only person. He really love in whole world. This treatment went for bit but seem like forever to John. Until John pass out again. John woke up to every day life which seem bit odd but his arm hurt like he had insect bite.

[zoolane]

John found himself wear his favourite casual clothes.The sun was bright all it slendor, catching John medium brown hair. He is cheerful as walked in this fake reality. Whispers are flowing in the air but where from. Everyone is going about normal, and busy lives. John is starting feel uneasy with big sweat beads running down his forehead. John come over with shiver, funny feeling that something wrong with goosebump and hair on back of neck stand on end. Shadows appear from nowhere round John.

[MystyrMystyry]

Very very good Zoo! :)

[zoolane]

After sometime, John mind and thoughts settle down. A memory came flood back to him which was not to far in the recent past, of summer evening at Book Club hotel. Himself and A.G drift away from others to the solitude of their room. Every touch and sense was woke on the evening. Even now John mind and body could feel like it was only yesterday. Suddenly John felt something hot near this skin. Out of nowhere burn mark had appear on his arm. Again John had weirdest and had impulse to change his chain of thought.John started to doubt his own mind of thing round him.

[zoolane]

I am feeling rather odd, I am not real here or this something faded of my existence. I kept see this logo with letters next to it"SE and set of handcuffs" in my mind eye for some reason I can not quite put finger on it. I have feeling that meaning of logo is sin sinter. Out of day drew the darkest merge with the shadows. John began to remember when he saw the red ink on his chest.

The superior children in their black uniforms, pull John across floor with nails intrude through the floor board. John is place in the chair that he started in. Judge Orwell with eyes like fire now with the hazel gone.

"As you will not said who or what A.G? or where is the 'Book Club' is held in what hotel. I here by hold on the charges that you hold against this society, you will be hang this evening". Her looking at him with all the menace and hater that she could summoned.

At eight, John was marching to town square. John stood in all his glorious that he find in himself. Out of corner of his eye. He saw only man he love and only person he had never be embroiled with.

[zoolane]

I have finish that 'Embroiled' is Ok, the end is disappointing but I couldn't figure out. It was suppose be that 'John' was to driven round in a car throught the town. Parade about like caged animal.

[hillwalker]

Hi zoo,

The ending was a little sudden - but you did a good job of creating a portrait of a sinister, fascist state

Perhaps John could have been driven through the city's streets in the back of a pick-up or similar vehicle - on display for all to see as a warning of what happens to anyone who flouts the law - before being publically executed in a football stadium.....!

H

[zoolane]

I understand excalt what your said that does end sudden. Might gave end other go soon.

[zoolane]

At half past seven at evening, John was put on a vehicle like one rubbish man uses in twenty century to pick up household items like washing machine. John had thick silver ring around his neck the chain was connected to the cage.

As John was parade in the black truck, with logo of 'SE and handcuffs' on the bonnet. A loud megaphone type of device was used to tell public at 'John Allan Poe is traitor to free modern and Western society. He is guilty of be part of book club and most of all be HOMOSEXUAL"

"I Judge Orwell will be executed this traitor to night outsider the Town Hall in main square at eight to night. Everyone will come or police will be let out".

At eight, John was marching to town square. John stood in all his glorious that he find in himself. Out of corner of his eye. He saw only man he love and only person he had be embroiled with.
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[hillwalker]

This is more in keeping with what we were probably all expecting - and dreading would happen. Chilling.

H