Beloved

[CarlyStephenson]

(I wrote this the day before Valentine's Day for my boyfriend)



To my eternal beloved -

A girl's heart, once broken
is now made whole - brought back
to life by a moment, a feeling;
she loves him.

No one else can possess my heart.

How do I love thee?
I love you with the passion of an
undying melody; notes softer than
teardrops falling through the midnight air.

I am a leaf in the wind.

Love that is pure; love that is as
haunting as the dying moon -
it can steal your breath in an
instant.

They are one person through time.

Promise me - promise to love the girl
with the broken heart. Show her
tenderness like a gentle touch,
passion to last forever.

Her heart is ever thine.

These words I write are all but three.

To my eternal beloved -
I love thee.

CAS 2/13/11

[Delta40]

very heartfelt indeed. I cringe reading love poems (but only because I distantly recall what romantic love felt like...!)

[tailor STATELY]

Enjoyed your poem.

I too felt a bit out of place in viewing this very personal moment.

Best, perhaps, to have tied your poem with a bow of fragrant forget-me-knots and placed under lock and key close to you and your beau's heart.

An eternal perspective... Enjoyed more.

Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY

[MorpheusSandman]

I think what comes through this is something very heartfelt. It's a bit derivative and corny in places, but if passion counts for more than originality then you have something worthwhile here.