Trampling Eden

[munkinhead]

Watch your big feet,
let there be nasturtiums.
Mind the ranunculus.

i put them in early
on the sixth day.

On second thought,
get your *** out of the garden,
you already broke the apple tree
and scared the snake.

[MorpheusSandman]

LOL, I love that last stanza! This is one piece I'd say could do with some lengthening and development, a real build up to that final payoff.

[deryk]

That poor snake.