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MystyrMystyry
03-27-2011, 11:18 PM
Where I'm living is a dangerous place

You can be happily yabbering in your

Backyard and maybe say blue, say,

In regard to the sky or the sea or

The chicory - but whichever you've

Uttered it innocently enough, and

The nutty old codger next door's only

Gone and decided to make it his

Business to overhear you while out there

Sharpening his spoons and tell his

Equally nutty wife (who's watering the

Garden Gnomes in the hope they'll grow)

The news and so while they're yabbering

Bungle the local poon hears this word


Blue


And deep in the


Fractured


Recesses it occurs

To the crazy dimwit that

Green and yellow make blue - don't they?

So he's down the shop and relates

This flapdoodle to Shelly

The overqualified cashier

Now with a minor predicament

On her hands - tell the boss

About Bungle's insight into

Additive colour synthesis

(which it isn't)

Or keep it to herself

When the boss returns from

Wherever he's been it's been

A slow morning so she mentions

That something has happened

By way of small talk with numpty

Who's brain he is shocked to find

Has slipped into gear (actually

Missed another one since last night)

And is hot on the phone to his wife

Who is at the hairdresser's getting

A hairdon't and shares the news with

The other chit-chatterers so that

A new conversation arises about

Colour physics and theory, and they arrive

At something that involves including


Black


So suddenly everyone's on their

Nokias Androids and iPhones

Calling whomsoever they can

And there's one hullaballoo

At the highschool and a

Bit of an initial murmer

At the state university

Because someone wrote

A letter to the editor

(Well a well expressed text)

About the goings on

And again the men in white coats

Arrive at the munter's doorstep

Only this time they will be

Listening to the answers

But drilby doesn't want

To talk because he's said his

Paragraph for the week

And there just isn't much more

Except that maybe everybody

Could consider including


Orange


(A reference to his craving for citrus)

And this starts a whole new discussion

New Scientist is on the line to the BBC

HBO is wiring Scientific American

A asks B tells C

Calls X wants proof from Y

And here's Z from NASA

With his penny worth

And it spread across the

Interconnectednet

Like wildfire

In the meantime

Dummy's explained

He merely overheard it

And put one and one together

And now they still talk

In hushed whispers

About all the colours

Except of course


Blue


It's been a few years

Since I said


Blue


Next time I'll make sure

No-one's hiding behind the dividing fence

deryk
03-28-2011, 12:10 AM
Frenetic as hell! But a good kind of hell. The phrasing and variations are inspiring. This is excellent. Time to reread.

Delta40
03-28-2011, 01:13 AM
sounds like chinese whispers gone berserk. You write with an infusion of energy M and put my head into a whirl!

MorpheusSandman
03-28-2011, 05:07 AM
I wonder if you were inspired by the origins of surrealism? The huge and abrupt subjective focus leaps and vivid immediacy of the images hit like an unconscious barrage of inspiration more than anything considered and controlled. Enjoyable, but I think it could do with some conscious sculpting.

Jerrybaldy
03-28-2011, 06:43 PM
A random stream of thoroughly enjoyable bollocks MM

everyadventure
03-28-2011, 09:25 PM
I liked this. How quickly drivel becomes theory, and then is deemed fact...

Cunninglinguist
03-29-2011, 01:11 AM
I especially enjoyed the nutty lady watering her garden gnomes :D memorable imagery! Mind if I steal it sometime?

MystyrMystyry
03-29-2011, 02:47 AM
Replies in Retrospective Reverse

Thanxx All

Cunning - You may just need to be more observant - next time you walk down the street look at everything and maybe imagine an alternative motive for what you see, or wonder exactly why that house is painted blue. I wrote a pome once that featured a row of trees in a garden that the owner had chainsawed flat all at the same height - everyone loved the image, but the place actually existed. Another time I saw an old guy taking out his bin - only that - but in the pome it contained severed body parts

every - Good theory - ostensibly it fits - but this one's about a little bit more than usual because it involves real people and attitudes peculiar to them - thus Bungle receiving a little more time than he might seem to deserve and an actual occurrence - though beyond that my lips arrrrrr sealed ;)

Jerry - Not totally random - just the way I've stylised it - but I'm glad you thoroughly enjoyed it :)

Mr Sandman - Not surrealism as such - and it was written to make you read to the end - I may rework it a little (I hadn't noticed I used 'yabbering' twice - an allusion to another pome? - but as I speak it's being published in this form so I'll keep it this way for a while longer

Delta40 - Chinese whispers is also a close call too - but not sufficiently close to call - but as for putting your delightful head in a whirl, You Are Here did that to me

Deryk - Much obliged my liege

Cunninglinguist
03-29-2011, 06:09 PM
Cunning - You may just need to be more observant - next time you walk down the street look at everything and maybe imagine an alternative motive for what you see, or wonder exactly why that house is painted blue. I wrote a pome once that featured a row of trees in a garden that the owner had chainsawed flat all at the same height - everyone loved the image, but the place actually existed. Another time I saw an old guy taking out his bin - only that - but in the pome it contained severed body parts

None can inspire more insanity than naked reality. The nutty lady reminded me of a line I recently put in a poem, actually: "My wife ran off with my best friend / So now I have no dog."

MystyrMystyry
04-15-2011, 06:31 PM
Yes - but that makes sense cunning, I mean if the context is right - I mean if your best friend was regarded as a dog - I don't know, maybe you need a new dog...