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[the facade]

Hey friends, here's a poem. Comments and suggestions (as well as title) appreciated;

*Currently untitled

I pocket your words -
stars embraced
in the fabric of sky.

I
look up to the dark
where distance grows
between carriers of light.

Why do you pull at my seams?
Time - you wearer of all things.

[deryk]

Very reminiscent of a particular Wordsworth poem in form and metrics. My heart leaps at the growing distance matched with the epiphany of time as space. Nicely arranged. You should keep the title.

[the facade]

Very reminiscent of a particular Wordsworth poem in form and metrics. My heart leaps at the growing distance matched with the epiphany of time as space. Nicely arranged. You should keep the title.

Thank you deryk for taking the the time to read and for the kind words!

[Delta40]

Title it. I read alot of currently untitled poems and I always feel the writer is not prepared to own their creative work (which probably isn't the case but its just the way I see it!) very short and every word is economically used. I especially like I pocket your words.