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Delta40
03-17-2011, 05:35 PM
As I move through a karta

like a comedic tottering existence
I wonder where grace may lie.
I focus on the ridiculously obvious


Slow intent absent


No meaning in
coordination


I dream that I look good
in my amateurish stealth.
As each foot
lunges forward
my arms cross and block

I come to a stop
but most of me continues to wobble
in the
aftershocks of movement

I pop like a party popper with no pop

MystyrMystyry
03-17-2011, 08:33 PM
Well I wouldn't want to come across you in a dark alleyway

Jerrybaldy
03-17-2011, 08:38 PM
My eyes are too old to cope with this :P

deryk
03-17-2011, 09:50 PM
Reading this was fun. Normally, the line deviations might have been a strain, but the comedic self-deprecation fastened my interest and expanded upon the form. I was once punched through a wall by a black-belt in Taekwondo in the dark (don't ask). This took me back. The last line exhales nicely from that.