poem

[MystyrMystyry]

silence



a

silence

so

raging

loud

you

could

barely

hear

a

pin

drop



immersion

in

warm

liquid

[deryk]

You should reorganize the last stanza to make it look like liquid dispersing.

[Mutatis-Mutandis]

Like what?

l__i____q_____u__________i_________________d

That would be kinda cool.

So, I tried doing more spaces in between each letter, but it would make it one space no matter what, hence the underscores.

[Armel P]

Like what?

l__i____q_____u__________i_________________d

That would be kinda cool.

So, I tried doing more spaces in between each letter, but it would make it one space no matter what, hence the underscores.

or:

imm
ersion
in warm liquid

[Delta40]

immmersion in ripples of l______i________q__________u___________i__________ d

[MystyrMystyry]

thanks

for

your

suggestions

but

I

think

I'll

just

leave

it

as

it

is

[deryk]

Sorry for the band of prescriptions and no cowbell. I think it works just fine.