Gas Stoves

[sundarramchand]

Gas Stoves



Lotus petaled flames

Tinged with Blue

Suspended in the darkness

Peacock hued

Krishna smiles in the darkness

Beckoning to the supreme Goddess

The beginnings of desire and memory

[deryk]

I really do like the primordial ring the last three lines give to the subject of flame. The poem is an obvious conduit for preternatural creation and human resourcefulness. While I appreciate the first half of the poem, I feel like there is an unnecessary repetition with "petaled", "blue", "peacock","hued". While those work individually, a cleanup of redundancy would strengthen the image. Aside from that, I think this is the best work I've read from you. It has both cogent definition and a sense of unknown wonder. Almost like something from nothing. Darkness. Click. Flickering light.

[sundarramchand]

Thanks !!

As i said, i was struck by the images which "resonate" with each other and with other themes from mythology / aesthetics etc and yes, the primordial conflict between darkness and light.

"Peacock hued" is more complex than blue and essentially relates to "Krishna", the Indian "god" while the blue tinged flame seems appropriate in the second line.

Personally, i am much fonder of the poem "Fragrance of flames" but i suppose the imagery here is possibly more striking