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sweety
02-28-2011, 07:48 AM
My first poem, so do not be kind.
Chop my block off, cut me down to size.
Clap me on the back, tell me I am great.
But do before you go, leave your leer behind.

The silent sea.

The rusty-red cage rolled and tumbled on the green sea grass,
as the lashing sea churned the yellow foam.
A blue plastic rope clasping the buoy above, showed its age.
Incapable of holding the pot, it gave way.
When the sea fell, we hauled fresh air.
And in anger spat at the waves.

PrinceMyshkin
02-28-2011, 10:29 AM
There's plenty of attractive energy in this but it feels as if the energy is asking, in vain, to be tamed.

sweety
02-28-2011, 11:42 AM
Like myself said the judge in vain.
Thanks.
S

deryk
03-18-2011, 02:27 PM
Lush colors. Excitation. A lovely frollic.