The Pregnant Teen

[Delta40]

Our love is shaped
like a wedding ring.

My titz are black and blue
where u beat them
with the spiked paddle
u surprised me with
on pay day.
Gr8

lol. I'm sure I look stupid
with titz like this.
The doc didn't laugh
but he said praps
it isn't a cool idea
while I'm preggers
to let u do it.

They're so tender
Is that how u like them?
Steak is sizzling in the pan
and I can't even feel
the fat when it splatters on them.

What would a doc know anyways?
I feel u get harder
when u grind your fist
into my stomach
and land another studded punch
across my nipples.

I don't care if u neva
bash my titz again really
but it makes u soooo happy!
I can't be happy if ur not
and Mum always said
love is about give and take.

Sweet FA will come between us.
This is my promise to u.
I can take
whatever u do to me.
I do it only for u
coz I want u to be happy.
See how I give back to u
by taking what u give?

Our love is shaped
like a wedding ring.

[PrinceMyshkin]

Oh Lord, Delta - this is SO sad, and all the more so for being written so convincingly in that ghastly text-speech or whatever one might call it! It may very well be my fuddy-duddy prejudices, but it's as if that economy of expression illustrates the shortage of mental resources behind it.

[the facade]

This is really interesting!
Gonna have to give it another look later.

[Jerrybaldy]

Hello Delta
I was thinking Skia was staying at yours for a moment there. I agree with Prince though that the style adds to the content and I am not about to argue with a mother over teenage girlhood. I also admire your ability to get back to a teenage mindset (no ageism intended) :D
Jerrynowgotagoatie

[_Shannon_]

This actually made me physically sick to read. As someone who was both pregnant as a teen and had the crap kicked out of her by a boyfriend.

I don't really "like" this poem---but something there rings powerful and true, I am sure, for me to have had the strong reaction that I did. (I just wanted to edit to add that I don't "like" it, I am pretty sure because it makes my skin crawl, not because it isn't any good)

[Haunted]

The battered wife syndrome all over again. It's so horrific that she's getting a beating right where it the fetus lies, and so willingly going along with it to please the torturer. The street talk treatment makes it even more hopeless.

[Delta40]

This is sickening. I met a girl on Saturday night and saw her breasts had been beaten to a pulp. Made more tragic by the fact that she smiled like some dumb animal and didn't seem to know she could set her own standards.

[Disagree]

What a sad poem, and powerful.


What would a doc know anyways?
I feel u get harder
when u grind your fist
into my stomach
and land another studded punch
across my nipples.

That part, particularly, was quite wrenching.

[moonbird]

Ugh. Disgusting.

[Hawkman]

Whilst I have to accept that both personality types actually exist, I cannot understand either of them. This is a hideous poem, but that doesn't make it bad, far from it. Powerful stuff Delta.

Live and be well. H

[Delta40]

thanks all. I'm sorry if it is upsetting but then again, I'm not. As Hawk says, these personality types actually exist - raising the next generation.....

[_Shannon_]

thanks all. I'm sorry if it is upsetting but then again, I'm not. As Hawk says, these personality types actually exist - raising the next generation.....

I hope you're not sorry! Truth is often very upsetting.