Blue

[everyadventure]

Beyond blue,
steeped in inky indigo,
apathy bleeds
staining all I touch.

[PrinceMyshkin]

I'm afraid this was like trying to get hold of jello that had not quite set.

[everyadventure]

@Prince: I am fond of Jell-o, but I perceive that wasn't a compliment... ;)

[PrinceMyshkin]

@Prince: I am fond of Jell-o, but I perceive that wasn't a compliment... ;)

There were two problems for me: 1) the poem went by before I could settle into it and 2) I couldn't make the leap with you as you abandoned the colour metaphors of the first 2 lines.

[Jerrybaldy]

I read this as an ode to the times you just cant be arsed to write (picking up on the ink reference) I am however notoriously bad at analysis :D

[MystyrMystyry]

Whassup Blue?

You threw us a baby stanza, and now you're waiting for the sharks to bite - it's a big blue ocean with plenty of other baby stanzas in it for us to fry

Blue blue my heart is blue

or

Blue skies - smiling at me

http://i1134.photobucket.com/albums/m605/mystyrmystyry/61NM3B5fPTL__SL500_AA300_.jpg

we watch and wait

[everyadventure]

Ah Jerry, I should have known you'd get it.

@MystyrMystyry: if it were any longer, it would no longer be apathy... but I hear you :)

[Delta40]

I see what prince and jerry mean. I'm supposing that when you pick up a pen anything that comes out of the nib is apathetic. I'd write more but I can't be bothered :biggrin5:

[Bar22do]

Perhaps you could shorten it even more, ea! :willy_nilly:, to sth like

Apathy bleeds
staining all I touch.

(but do you want to say apathy has noble (blue) blood? ?)

Best to you --- beware of sharks!

Bar

[everyadventure]

http://i1134.photobucket.com/albums/m605/mystyrmystyry/blue.png
MystyrMystyry can turn ANYTHING into a poem, look how FANCY!

[MystyrMystyry]

Thanks every