Glazed Love

[Delta40]

You spent years
with do-it-yourself chess kits.
Smooth, unblemished wood,
tiny brushes
for swirling varnish techniques
to be perfected across time.
The sweet resin
blurred your eyesight
as you worked
toward nothing of value
and escaped everything
that ever mattered.
I prayed your tears mingled
with the lacquer
that I might sense your love
each time I rubbed
a coated pawn
across my cheek.
I inhaled the varnish
to recapture the fantasy
of who I thought you were
only to be glued
between the dross shavings
you left behind.

[PrinceMyshkin]

You set the scene up beautifully, but I think you're missing one or two lines at the end.

[Delta40]

I see what you mean. Let me go for a swim at the beach and think about it. BRB.

[Delta40]

Ok. added. let me know what you think

[MystyrMystyry]

That works better - the pointlessness of love and chess as metaphor made even more pointless by the obsessive decoration of pawns



Also there's a lonely hearts website I stumbled upon that may interest you - a Russian truckdriver for Delta, guaranteed to never break her heart

[Delta40]

thanks for the offer M but I can wait awhile yet!

[everyadventure]

"as you worked
toward nothing of value"

Darn, I'm afraid I can see myself in this... disconcerting...

[Jerrybaldy]

I am unsure how much of this is metaphor- but then, its poetry, I am supposed to be unsure.

I can see an analogy with do it yourself chess kits and poetry writing too.

I also smell paternity :)

Nicely done.

cheers
Jerry

[Delta40]

I also smell paternity :)

Paternity it is. :nod:

[Mutatis-Mutandis]

With the title "Glazed Love," I thought it was going to be about something entirely different. Good poem, still.

[paperleaves]

Wow, this is a beautiful intrusion to such a clear image of disappointment and longing...the last 6 lines are SO powerful! This is wonderful.

love
paper

[Delta40]

Thanks Mutatis. What did you think Glazed Love might have been about?


Thanks Paperleaves. I think you your comment on the poem is very precise indeed.

[Mutatis-Mutandis]

Thanks Mutatis. What did you think Glazed Love might have been about?

Suffice it to say it's quite explicit. Think about it . . . what substance would glaze someone in an expression of "love"? :lol:

I have a sick mind. My apologies.

[Delta40]

:blush5:oh!

[everyadventure]

Actually, when I saw the title I thought of a love affair with Krispy Creme donuts!

[Mutatis-Mutandis]

Actually, when I saw the title I thought of a love affair with Krispy Creme donuts!
:lol:

[PrinceMyshkin]

Ok. added. let me know what you think

I didn't note this until now, and checked out the added 3 lines which I think bring the poem to a more powerful, more meaningful conclusion