Shadows

[neelboroooah]

I look and look, for miles I see,
A constant darkness, that is me.
And in this dark, I am alone,
Know not I, where is home.

For though I loathe this very trait,
I cannot but live, but as its mate.
Pain I get, mine eternal curse,
Echo it does this very verse,
And grows the darkness, as the deal,
Until no more, I can feel.
Your joys and sorrows, mean naught to me,
I am worse than you can possibly be.

Though I might deceive the night,
From the day I cannot hide my fright.

And in this dark, I stumble and fall,
Knowing not who to call,
For though I search, I cannot find,
A single person who is mine.

A light I try to ignite in me,
A light that will set me free,
A light that will, a beacon create,
For all those suffering the same fate.

Dispel this darkness, I know not how,
For it does not falter, stop, or take a bow.

This light of mine, where shall I find?
Who amongst you will be so kind?

Till such a light, I find one day,
This darkness in me is here to stay.

[Jerrybaldy]

English is not your first language I would guess. It makes it hard but do not give up.
JB

[tailor STATELY]

Welcome to lit.net, I enjoyed your journey.

Do not

be afraid

to not

rhyme

Look

forward

to your

next

offering

Burmashave

Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY

[deryk]

I have to say, it seems more like you were searching for rhymes than to communicate what was significantly occurring in the poem. I liked it when you tried to personalize darkness, and described it as "taking a bow", I think once you get those little abstractions "moving", you'll have better luck than simply having them box themselves.

[MorpheusSandman]

If you're going to use end-rhymes there are two important things to keep in mind; one is the meter, because end-rhymes create expectations, and meter is what fulfills or (when needed) interrupts and subverts that expectation. But you lose the reader when they trip over the rhythm to get to the rhyme. The second thing to keep in mind is not to indulge in too many archaicisms to make the lines and rhymes "fit". You engage in a lot of inverted verb/objects here, and even some complete subject/verb/object inversions ("know not I"). These can be used occasionally, especially for effect, but too many of them creates too much artificiality.