Two Bee

[the facade]

Hey all, I'm sure similar word-play has been done before but here's another one to add to the list :)

Two Bee

Some bees
leave their hives,
never to return.

They have forgotten
that it takes two bee
to make bees.

Some ask me why
I don’t sting those
slackers who beelittle
their saccharine
home of honey.

They have forgotten
that it takes two bee
to make bees.

[Delta40]

quaint lines Facade. I thought this would be a two bee or not two bee question!

[the facade]

but it is :)
at least the second time around

thanks for reading!

[AuntShecky]

Well, I hate to be a wiseasp about this, but actually when it comes to bees, it takes more than "two" to tango --

http://answers.ask.com/Science/Other/how_do_bees_reproduce

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Queen_bee

[the facade]

You are perfectly right. I've attempted to use what may not be a perfect metaphor.

On a sidenote and disregarding the metaphor itself, would the conceit be clearer if I switched "two bee" with "to be" in the end?

Thanks

[Delta40]

what about
for it to be
it takes two bees?

[the facade]

what about
for it to be
it takes two bees?

Thank you Delta, I like your suggestion.
But I think it might not properly convey what I'm trying to say: in the first context it is the obvious meaning - that you need more than one bee to make bees. in the second context - "to be" is the essence of "bees".

I'm thinking of switching it the second time. Something along the lines of:

They have forgotten
that it takes to be
to make be's.

That way it will sound the same both times but obviously it's not grammatically correct. I dunno, any thoughts? :)