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Donna allegra
02-20-2011, 09:45 PM
The sun, rising from the waves over the sand,
always the same, always changing.
Ancient crabs rising sideways from their lairs
with a flutter of furry toenails,
raising the pointy blackness of their eyes to the stir above them.

Fishes swimming delicately in the still vastness beyond,
never thinking of tomorrow or yesterday but only of today.
Five strong birds gliding, all muscled splendor and reckless force,
cutting the breeze in two with cultured wings.

And, through it all, the same quiet energy
breathes life into the wind that pushes the sand
that curls up under my children’s toes as they frolic,
as joyous as the crabs and fishes and birds
and the great and wonderful power,
on the brown shore.

everyadventure
02-20-2011, 10:27 PM
I liked the imagery of "Five strong birds gliding, all muscled splendor and reckless force,
cutting the breeze in two with cultured wings" but felt "on the brown shore" was a little anticlimactic for the ending line.

A nice poem.

Delta40
02-20-2011, 10:29 PM
I was struck by 'furry toenails' Do crabs have them?

hillwalker
02-21-2011, 07:10 AM
Anything to do with the sea or sea shore is enough to grab my attention - however, this piece surpassed my expectations with its originality and subtle charm. A wonderful poem.

H

Bar22do
02-21-2011, 08:23 AM
So subtle, celebration of Life! A marvelous poem indeed! Thanks from Bar

Hawkman
02-21-2011, 08:44 AM
A charming poem and a delight to read. As for the crabs I think that dry sand sticking to their feet could be described as furry, although I've never seen nails on a crab, but, overall, the imagery is wonderful. Good rhythm too.

Live long and prosper - H

tailor STATELY
04-21-2011, 12:30 AM
Welcome to Litnet !

One reason why I go back to read what I've missed when I take a sabbatical - sweet gems like your poem.

Enjoyed very much. Brilliant imagery and wonderful use of language.

Sincerely,
tailor STATELY