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Delta40
02-20-2011, 06:58 PM
The indian restaurant
that resides in your curried heart
is just the place for me
what, with your whiny needs
and my nagging disease,
you say I need a new position.
I guess the Chinese takeaway wasn't enough.
All those glazed ducks on hooks
didn't do it for us.
So you stick a red dot on my forehead
and drape me in your grandma's
gold patterned curtain
and lace tablecloth.
You slap my behind and yell
go! go! go!
How is your meal?
Is everything alright at your table?
No, we don't have sweet and sour pork on the menu.
Hey, son of a donkey's ***,
I don't do dishes, not anymore.
I look ridiculous like this -
Oh! You want me to do the accent too?
Well goodness gracious me!
Excuse me Sahib, but this position...
it is not for me.
Why? Oh for many reasons.
If you think I'm going to spend my life
picking up after you,
you're wrong.
You only imagine Indian women are like slaves.
I tell you our marriage is a white elephant!
You're the worst mahout I have ever seen
in a pinstripe suit!
Ok, this act is wearing thin,
like us.
When do I get to be me?
What are you trying to cover?
So what if I'm a redhead?
You changed me into this because of freckles?
Here, have a menu,
take a seat
I'll get to you when I'm ready.
I have other people to serve
It's true.
This fast food marriage is not just
about you.
Can't you see I have a drive thru?
Look, if it makes you feel better
then yes, the food and me
are authentic Indian
But we've definitely done
our last course.
No dessert.
Have you heard of a pappadum?
I'm filing for one now!

everyadventure
02-20-2011, 07:12 PM
Zowie! Imaginative & sassy. I'll never look at my tablecloth the same way again...

Jerrybaldy
02-20-2011, 09:17 PM
You are getting more and more prose ridden Delta. I guess you are struggling between playwright and poet. I dont care if it is full of prose or not as I enjoy reading my friend, I am just giving critique here :D

Delta40
02-20-2011, 09:20 PM
It is prosey but I like how it feels and I enjoyed writing it. I'm sure its just another phase I'm going through...

Jerrybaldy
02-20-2011, 09:24 PM
I would add that the food element is VERY Deltaesque :D x

Delta40
02-20-2011, 10:16 PM
I like food and I have always enjoyed stories that include food. I think that is why I like Children of the New Forest so much.

Delta40
02-21-2011, 05:22 PM
Does anyone else think this piece is too prosy to be a poem?

PrinceMyshkin
02-21-2011, 06:05 PM
Does anyone else think this piece is too prosy to be a poem?

Certainly not I! And I love the concept of pappadum as a euphemism for divorce. "Mahout... in a pin-stripe suit" is wonderfully funny.

everyadventure
02-21-2011, 06:34 PM
Nope, it isn't too prosy! I like it a lot.

Delta40
02-21-2011, 07:35 PM
Thanks Prince and EA. I am amazingly ignorant. I had to look up what prose means....!

Jerrybaldy
02-23-2011, 09:00 PM
Hold on a cotton-picking moment, I didn't say it was too prosey to be poetry just that it was prosey and I have written many a prosey poem. Was just commenting that it was a change from errrmmm your less prosey stuff. Glad I got that sorted out *wanders off, looking for Daffy*

Delta40
02-24-2011, 12:39 AM
I miss Daffy. If you find him, drag him back here kicking and screaming.