The Daughter.

[zoolane]

The Daughter.

A child stands alone in the corner, weeping quietly at first. But get loud just make sure at whole world know she there. The world just stare straight pass her. Sure must bring this on herself? 4 foot young person with medium blonde hair in mess from just get up out of bed, but look kind of smart with cow, pink pj's. And leopard print, pink dress gown with cow from her favor aunt. All this in space half an hour get out of bed. Final she allow leave corner. She determined to say her piece. They listen to her. She still understands why she got trouble the first. She storm off locked herself in bathroom and wails starting again.

She has low self-esteem, she has lots abilities and yet shyness holds back from these tasks. Everyone know that she able to doing them with bit preserve and confident in herself. She happy, cheered young girl and bright with her own personality. I am very proud of her, love her dearly but sometime she drives me insane.

[MANICHAEAN]

Zoo
This must be your younger sister? You have captured her personality and manipulation traits well.
Best wishes
M.

[zoolane]

Zoo
This must be your younger sister? You have captured her personality and manipulation traits well.
Best wishes
M.

Thanks M, it my middle daughter above writing is about.


Second Daughter.

She whispers in dark of her bedroom, underneath the cover she whispers I am older enough, I know I am why do they not understand? Really deep down she knows the reality at she is not older enough to do as she please. Thirteen is between of being become younger lady but she still has way to go before she gets there. Just because friends have more freedom or stay late on weekday, she think she should allow.

This young lady is independent, has own ideas which good, brain is on go all time. She working hard at school but get distracts. Her ocean blue eyes looking through the glasses that she wear thick black liquid on her eyes lashes but distort their beautiful appearance. Her young slender body is just right for her statue and her layers golden brown hair settle on her shoulders which she sit her ponder what to do next.

[zoolane]

Third Daughter.

She sits on her bed with smallest tear trickling down her cheek and hugs her tigger tight as possible. Wish her sisters with be nice and play with her. Why they are being horrible to her? After while she composes herself decide maybe her best mummy in world would like some help. Her mummy is tried watch television. She slips her under the covers. Cuddle her mummy and watched ‘Ice Road Trucks’. Gentle her eyes close as she drift off to sleep. Next to her best friend and tigger.

She fired temper, with bags of confidence and will tried anything. She funny little personality all of 3 an half feet with big smile and hug ever.

[MANICHAEAN]

What a wonderful family zoo!
Very well written.
M.

[hillwalker]

Three beautiful daughters - you have captured their individuality remarkably well and the way you describe them shows how proud you are of them all.

H

[everyadventure]

It was interesting to see this new direction in your writing. You've definitely got a knack for horror, you've got that down, but I also enjoyed seeing the tenderness in these pieces. My favorite lines from each:


I am very proud of her, love her dearly but sometime she drives me insane.


golden brown hair settle on her shoulders which she sit her ponder what to do next.


bags of confidence

Thanks for sharing!

[zoolane]

Thank you all for your comments.