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xelashouts
02-18-2011, 11:03 AM
A lot like a college setting, with eccentric characters, some may compare to skins, but this is a college setting, a little more serious I guess? I dislike the show skins, I feel as if this might be a tad more interesting, please let me know what you think of the characters
1.
Awkward, babbly, pale, skrwany, goofy, musically talented, writes songs, slightly emotional, head over heels for her, Maryland, Baltimore, quarter Asian, a lot of Irish, changing blue eyes, fear not tattoo, scooter, currito, soda, drinking- energy weird emotional plays guitar flirty paranoid sweet gets to him easily drinks fast might be slightly annoying, artist, nice, baseball three quarter sleeve shirts, no drugs, product design major, video games, makes friends easily, just not extremely close ones, rob, art friends, music friends, only child
Possible episodes, performing, unable to perform, song writing, relationship (Katie), his hypocritic feelings, rebounding hard core, drinking,
2.
Loud, obnoxious, fun, out going, djing, jewish, tries his best, not ugly not really attractive, energy, unicycle, talented, chinese yoyo, wealthy, friendly, talkative, can be a douche if you don’t know him, truthful, can be serious, likes to joke/ play around, drinks moderately, helpful, does not let others influence himself, caring, loud music, jokester, health major, bux county, pa, no drugs, alis x2, older brother, possibly speaks Hebrew
Possible episodes, his back ground, his life with his roommate, the way people precieve him, his djing, keeping himself busy, no drugs, pressure from alcohol, his 7 year med program, his electronics, his love for music, his serious side on grades
3.
Curly hair, hat, purple, soft bed, changing green/brown eyes, working out, muscles, energy drinks, eating healthy, used to be bad boy/ drug addict, every drug in the book, girl friend, loves beer, likes drinking a lot, funny, jokes, nice, takes care of people, understanding, odd, likes babies, hates feet, tobacco sauce, has lots of nuts, protein shakes, drinking- high energy, loud, fun, health major, pa but near del, intricate tattoo (earth wind fire words), pretty organized, younger sister, younger brother, ice hockey
Possible episodes, relapse into drugs, his girl friend, his love for beer, he hates feet, his slightly weird personality with babies and purple
4.
Smart, brown, stinky feet, goes home every other weekend, owns gas station, chemical engineer, has funny weird friends, low tolerance, drinking- high high energy wild chipped a tooth throws up light weight, can’t be with his girlfriend, makes stupid but addictive jokes, likes to dance, friendly, caring, sharing, cherryhill, jersey, I think no drugs, bela, gloomy glen, reed, younger brother, speaks two languages I think hindi
Possible episodes, his girlfriend, religion, the way people precieve him, his background, his studies
5
Pot head, works at front desk, monotone, nonchalant, Virginia, drinking- depressed, smoking- happy generous, batman tattoo, funny, cracks funny jokes, quiet until you talk to him, video games, nice, sweet, wants to try shrooms badly, a little unorganized, sean, Brandon, engineer, older sister
Possible episodes, why he smokes to be happy but to drink socially he gets depressed, his roommate, his working, his late classes, smoking
6.
Rock climber, tomboy, sleep talk, drinking- newbie dizziness truthful, dresses really pretty when she dresses up, laid back, chill, doesn’t think much of future when making decisions, watches a lot of tv, new Hampshire, misses home, has a big family, talkative with her hometown friends, judgemental sometimes, no drugs, polis ci, pat, Shannon, slightly messy, gets bursts of cleaning, vacuums, hates smoking, no drugs, dyes her hair black, soccer, French Canadian
Possible episodes, home sickness, this whole city is new for her, drinking, dealing with drugs and friends, diversity,
7
Asian, looks small, yellow, kind of chubby, central jersey, likes to try new things, a tad annoying, out there, cute, compact, sleeps, sick, drinking- slutty sloppy messy sometimes ok, smokes- hyper then chill relaxed, wants to try everything, no cigerettes only when drunk, lazy, sometimes unorganized, aloof, sometime says stupid things, seems like she needs to be helped a lot, closest to a little kid, panda, younger brother, younger sister, wears north face all the time, dyes her hair brown, judgemental, business admin, chinese, speaks canto and a little Korean
Possible episodes, her love for Korean things, her hookups, drunk nights, the way she is precieved as innocent yet she isn’t, her background, her being Asian and not exactly seen that, being the youngest looking
8
Brown, good looking, tall, weird body shape, big upper body, small bottom half, business admin, family owns restaurants, dc, no drinking, no drugs, strong, unorganized, misses home, akward funny jokes, works out, feels like he doesn’t belong, friendly, outgoing, likes to dance, youtube, skype, speaks two languages, Persian
Possible episodes, his leave from philly, he relationship, his distance, his annoynce from two main characters, love for speed, possibly metaphoroically, the entrepreneurship of his business from his father,

SIDE EPISODES- roommate relationships, character relationships, party nights, ice skating, drinking nights, emotional nights, long talk nights, accidents, adventures out, shopping, going home, visiting other’s houses, beach?, fights, bickers, ***** talks, side characters, judgment things.

everyadventure
02-18-2011, 12:12 PM
I had a hard time analyzing this, as (IMHO) it isn't the characters THEMSELVES that make an interesting story, but the interactions BETWEEN them. But, it seems like you KNOW these people (maybe not literally, but as an author you've figured them out), so you should be able to pull together something good.

Best of luck, can't wait to see what you come up with!

hillwalker
02-18-2011, 12:38 PM
This is a list of characters and their traits - characters you obviously know quite well.

But expecting your readers to find anything rewarding here is asking rather a lot without any story to show how they interact. It is impossible to give an opinion or criticism about this?

H