Soul Palace and more to come.

[zoolane]

Soul Palace.

Flounder soul, wander here or there.
Where shall the soul go?
Wallowing the pity of their near afterlife.
Ominous is soul, round macabre in his palace.
Small instruments made their music heard.
The poor soul just waits but is never alone.

[hillwalker]

The closing line of this is wonderfully beguilling. And the words 'flounder' and 'wallowing' suggest some disembodied soul struggling to reach salvation. Another huge step in a new direction, zoo.

H

[PrinceMyshkin]

Bravo, Zoo! As Hill indicates, this seems like a new direction for you and one in which you assert both confidence and freedom!

[zoolane]

The closing line of this is wonderfully beguilling. And the words 'flounder' and 'wallowing' suggest some disembodied soul struggling to reach salvation. Another huge step in a new direction, zoo.

H


Bravo, Zoo! As Hill indicates, this seems like a new direction for you and one in which you assert both confidence and freedom!

Thank you both for your comments. I am not sure if some words work in this poem.

The Obscurity.

Hallucination of the bogeymen in distance.
Silhouette dances in the mist of obscurity.
Maze is thickening across chersonese.
The Phantom arrive that palace door.
Pounding with his giant size fist.
Wanting his pound flesh.

[everyadventure]

Ooo, "The Obscurity" made me shudder! Oooo!

[PrinceMyshkin]

I didn't recognize and couldn't figure out what "chersonese" meant until I Googled it. There's a strong, spooky authority in this.

[zoolane]

I didn't recognize and couldn't figure out what "chersonese" meant until I Googled it. There's a strong, spooky authority in this.

Thank you EA, I am glad had right effect. Prince is good then?

The Joint.

My joints will leave me soon.
They crease to move without effort.
I am in hell with fire, burn my joints.
The flesh is being cooked for my tea.
The meat is falling of bone.
It tender in my mouth.
It tastes delicious.
Would you like some?

[zoolane]

The Moor.

Piece through the shadows.
Lurk a vague beast and stalking in pea soup.
Mystery creature hide beneath the ancient rock.
With it tooth pick at the ready.
The swamp that being on moor for centuries at made it food by swallow four legs and two legs.
World change the swamp going solid.
With shoves and pick axes start hammering,
Bones are come peer through grain.

[Delta40]

I like the first two most. Very eerie and I really believe your style of writing so suits the macabre.

I think the joint reminded me of a giant sitting down after he roasted Jack! It doesn't have the same darkness the first two have.

[everyadventure]

The Joint: holy heebie-jeebies! I envisioned Hannibal Lector leering at me: would you like some? Heck no! Let me out of here!

[zoolane]

Thank you Delta and Every, I glad you like the first two as well D. The Joint did not turn out way I want it to or did The Moor.

Murder In Mind.

Who shall I murder today?
Should be my neighbor or friend?
Or maybe even you?
Shall slice and diced you with my meat carver?
Tied you up and let blood drained down the sink?
Drugged you with lots pills in your tea?
Maybe just leave you for other day.

[PrinceMyshkin]

Somehow that last line is at the same time funny and the scariest of them all!

[zoolane]

Somehow that last line is at the same time funny and the scariest of them all!

It just show what wonder week I am having with kids so far.

[Delta40]

yes, leave me for a day, marinade me to make me tender. lol

[zoolane]

The Unholy.

The whine noise howls in wind.
Moaning is descent on the hills.
The banshee screaming the unholy sound.
The lament is carrying over the shores of land.
She drifts within the wind.
Haunting the fisher’s men at night.

[Delta40]

Moaning is descent on the hills - very effective. I don't think lament sits with the cry of the banshee as lament is associated more with grief, unless that is how you see the banshee, of course.

another chilling piece Zoo

[Jerrybaldy]

You capture more than you should be able to do so in so few lines zoo. That and your unique style is your gift.

[zoolane]

Thank you for comments Delta and Jerry.

[qimissung]

I read your poems, zoolane. As Jerrybaldy says, you capture a lot in a few lines. They are good,and you have the gift. :)

[zoolane]

I read your poems, zoolane. As Jerrybaldy says, you capture a lot in a few lines. They are good,and you have the gift. :)

Thank you qimissung, I am not sure gift but I enjoyed writing whether it be poetry or stories.

[zoolane]

Twisting Of Fate.

Twisting of fate is in the air.
Its turn of my spirit.
Is deep ed and around of sinister feelings.
Murder or act of violence is flooding my soul.
With the rope hang there.
With your neck.
Incase in it.

[everyadventure]

Oh geeeeez. Your poems have gotten to the point where they totally FREAK ME OUT. Disturbing beyond belief.

You are one heck of a powerful writer, zoo!

[zoolane]

Oh geeeeez. Your poems have gotten to the point where they totally FREAK ME OUT. Disturbing beyond belief.

You are one heck of a powerful writer, zoo!

Thank you for comment EA. I am sorry if they freak you out.

[Delta40]

Twisting of Fate reminds of churning wind swirling into a knot of violence.