All in the game

[Jerrybaldy]

'Jump', she whispered
'but take me with you'.
I held her hand,
it shook despite
the balmy breeze.
I lit two cigarettes
and threw them over.
We could smoke
in a minute.
'Ladies first'.
'You see any ladies'?
I saw her souless eyes.
I saw the wounds inside.
I looked at her deflated waist.
'Rock, paper, Scissors'?
She smiled,
for the first time,
'Rock'.
I saw a rock on the beach
far below.
'Paper' I returned
and passed a note
which instructed
in purple crayon
'Jump'.
She jumped into the air
and landed beside me.
I laughed
at her joke
and pushed her
to the gulls
and the rock down below.
I awoke with a start
with the sheets
twisted and wet.
'Bad dream babe'?
she asked
from just beneath the duvet.
We held close
and her hand slipped
down from my chest.
I felt her encircle me
and heard a metalic snip
as she laughed and cried out,
'Scissors'.

[firefangled]

I like this a lot, even though I'm not sure I fully understand it. I believe that is part of the enjoyment.

It's seems a little creepy, but that's a good thing for a weird dream to be.

[everyadventure]

Why did this bring to mind Lorraina Bobbitt?

I like the playful conversation, but it certainly turned dark quickly!

[firefangled]

Why did this bring to mind Lorraina Bobbitt?

I like the playful conversation, but it certainly turned dark quickly!

Yes, thus the creepy feeling I got.

[hillwalker]

At first I thought we were back on the pier revisiting one of your earlier poems - perhaps that was the jumping off point for this one.

Love the clever play on the 'rock, paper, scissors' game - especially as I did not see the final snip coming. This has to be one of your smartest on here.

H

[Delta40]

There is an element of daring and recklessness here. Something that rears its ugly head and serves as a reminder of the way we were (ok so I watched the movie the other night!) However, the edge is where we long to venture but ultimately, we move further inland, where it is safe.

my thoughts only.

[Jack of Hearts]

Yikes!




J

[blank|verse]

Yikes is right! Does she happen to have two sisters in the weaving trade??

This is an enjoyable piece, Jerry, but because it's so strongly narrative-based, I wonder if it would make a better short story. The short lines work against the flow of the narrative, I feel. I suppose you could say they also are being 'cut off', but I think it would work better with longer lines. Just a thought.

[Jerrybaldy]

thank you all. Truth is as usual I didnt know the end myself until I got there. I enjoy lack of direction although I have never tried the alternative.
thanks again
Jerry

[zoolane]

Great poem I think love last two lines. as she laughed and cried out,
'Scissors'.