Come Alive

[Jack of Hearts]

Natalie I scratched you
this quick lil' diddy.
Oh, sweet Natalie.
You're gonna live
that I won't die;
Come alive Natalie,
Natalie of mine.

Beautiful girl,
I've fallen in love.
Dutiful artist
persuades them to love
you too, Natalie!
Be true, Natalie!
to your life and ours;
Your hour is dawning,
I'm counting the hours.

[hillwalker]

A song to a loved one - but I'm uncertain whether or not she is still with us.

Simple - but perhaps a little too personal for others to appreciate fully.

H

[PrinceMyshkin]

Like Hill, I'm not sure whether Natalie is alive or dead but there's something weirdly beautiful in the mystery of your and her inter-dependence.

[Jack of Hearts]

Thank you both for reading this silly little poem, and thanks as well for being more kind to it than it perhaps deserves. Lately this writer has been thinking about Natalie quite a bit.




J

[everyadventure]

It's a lucky woman who has a man who writes poems for her.

[Jack of Hearts]

Thanks, everyadventure. The writer can't wait for you all to meet her.



J

[PrinceMyshkin]

It's a lucky woman who has a man who writes poems for her.

It's a lucky man who has a woman who inspires him to write poems for her.

[Jerrybaldy]

Its a lucky dog that is given a bone by a man who has a woman to inspire him.
You do yourself down, Jack, its a love poem, the hardest of all things to write and escape alive.
best wishes
Jerry

[Jack of Hearts]

Thanks Jerrybaldy. The writer feels disingenuous when he considers your kindness alongside what the work is really meant to be. But then, let he who is not slightly maladjusted cast the first stone.




J

[jajdude]

It's a lucky man who has a woman who inspires him to write poems for her.

True enough but is any other worth the bother?

[drago]

It's a lucky woman who has a man who writes poems for her.

I have never trusted a man who wrote me poetry. But seeing as I am a self-proclaimed 'poet', it is more an inner distrust one would suppose.


I agree that this poem sounds more as lyric than anything. But it impressed upon me a sinister atmosphere that I have yet to rid myself of, frankly. I am also uncertain whether her 'hour' that appears to be ending is more of a spotlight she can enjoy, the demise of herself as a singular person to be conjoined with you as two beings, or if she is dying. Of course, I am most likely far off from the point of your poem altogether! I found it notable, none the less. I can hear it being sung - yet overnobly or corruptly, I do not know.

[Jack of Hearts]

SarahDrago your response most pleases this writer. It's an unhealthy relationship as time soon will tell.




J

[drago]

SarahDrago your response most pleases this writer. It's an unhealthy relationship as time soon will tell.




J

And that is the joy of feeling a poem and, somehow, seeing.

[Delta40]

Not to be macabre but I thought about a long since dead person still in residence having a tune played to them when you got home from work and made tea for two on the patio...but this readers mind is in that place right now and I don't mean to cause offence. I liked the chirpy tone to this while having the image in my mind