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Delta40
02-01-2011, 06:47 PM
Being stood up by you hurt me.
Don't get me wrong
It's not about you
so much as your action
Letting me down
casts me back
to other men
I have cherished and loved
Father
brothers
uncles
cousins
Your action reminds me
of a pattern of pursuit
The kind where loved ones
don't come to my aide
and I clamber for their attention.

Ah sweet love
makes me grateful to receive
the smallest of morsels
that fall to the floor
where I relish its flavour
and hunger for more.

They don't keep in touch
unless I call.
I'm ready to message you
with all the force of my past.
Brace yourself for over the top
It might scare you from a mile.
Believe me.
It isn't about you
so much as your action.
I'm as dumb as the next gal
Not that dumb.
Did I say somehwere
I deserve better?
About feeling emotional?
Is it truly a social crime?

While I ponder the cards
we are dealt in this life
and endeavour to transform
my experiences into some
profound philosophy of truth
that is as rich as it is honest,
You reply to my text
R U jew 4 yaw .'s?


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everyadventure
02-01-2011, 10:33 PM
This stanza could stand alone as a poem:
Ah sweet love
makes me grateful to receive
the smallest of morsels
that fall to the floor
where I relish its flavour
and hunger for more.

Have to confess I didn't understand the text. Geez, I am so uncool. I'm too young to be this old!!

Delta40
02-01-2011, 10:35 PM
you don't understand the final two lines? clue: txt tork

Delta40
02-02-2011, 09:01 AM
It is possible that the the poem is not as clear as I thought.

Oniw17
02-02-2011, 09:08 AM
It's off-topic, but I can't help but ask....what happened to that lady in your av?

everyadventure
02-02-2011, 11:19 AM
Is he asking if you're PMS-ing?

Jerrybaldy
02-02-2011, 05:14 PM
I was thinking the last line was using the American of calling a full stop a period but I may well be way off.

I am sensing you are not to fond of men in general Delta, based on your experiences of many a bastard.

It is self deprecating and honest of emotion, including self pity and it is a must read as are all of your posts.

Delta40
02-02-2011, 05:26 PM
lol. the poem is about feeling legitimately angry but the response (are you due for your period) is a complete discount of everything the person feels.

thanks for your comments