Goodbye Poem

[Sarahlynn97]

No matter what happened between me & you, it will never happen again. You've hurt me, way too many times. While your happy, it feels like there are knives getting shoved into my back. You always made me your second option, now I'm making myself no option to you. I don't care how many times you say sorry. Sorry won't cut it this time. I had to say sorry for the times that you couldn't say sorry. You always told me you cared about me. That was a lie, if you ever cared about me then none of this would've happened. You tore me apart, more then you know. I was scared to trust you & now I know why. There was no trust. & now, I'm saying goodbye to you. Now you'll know how I felt the whole time. Goodbye.



*please tell me what you think.

[Delta40]

I think this is an angry, hurtfilled piece. Some grammar and spelling errors aside, I think poetry is better in verse form which makes for better reading.

for example

No matter what happened between me & you,
it will never happen again.
You've hurt me, way too many times.
While your happy,
it feels like there are knives
getting shoved into my back.

You always made me
your second option,
now I'm making myself
no option to you.

I don't care
how many times you say sorry.
Sorry won't cut it this time.
I had to say sorry
for the times that you
couldn't say sorry.

You always told me
you cared about me.
That was a lie,
if you ever cared about me
then none of this would've happened.

You tore me apart,
more then you know.
I was scared to trust you
& now I know why.
There was no trust. & now,
I'm saying goodbye to you.
Now you'll know
how I felt the whole time.
Goodbye.

From a poetic perspective, it rings like an angry goodbye note rather than a poem but the fact that there is so much passion here, I would be inclined to accept this piece as a gushing overflow of emotions that can't spill out fast enough.

keep writing!

[MystyrMystyry]

I agree with Delta

As a first post it seems an unusual choice - as though you really want to say it to someone in particular and you're almost sure they'll see it because of it's place in the recent posts list

But yes, it would have made me feel well and truly dumped

[YesNo]

...if you ever cared about me then none of this would've happened....

So, what happened?