Enemies of My Spoken Thoughts

[Jassy Melson]

(a prose poem)
My enemies won't object
as long as I'm not speaking about the truth
of God or Jesus.
If I speak of them as being the truth,
my enemies will most assuredly object.
Not only will they object, they will shut me up.
And make no mistake about it, they will shut me up
(We have ways of making you not talk.)
So-called Christians might object
to my calling these murderers of my spoken thoughts enemies.
They will say you should love your enemies
(which has nothing to do with what I'm saying).
There are only a few ways to get around these murderers:
through poetry, drama, school courses,
and going to a church.
I'm not getting around it right now
because what I "say" on the internet
is not being spoken in public.
(Some might say it's not a prose poem either. I must admit
it lacks rhythm and form in some places.)
Unless I want my spoken thoughts
about the truth of God and Jesus crucified,
I will not speak of them in public.
Enemies of my spoken thoughts are murderers.
God is love. Jesus died for you.

[everyadventure]

A big topic that deserves to be tackled. I'd actually like to see this written in essay form, so you could elaborate more fully on the subject.

[Jassy Melson]

Thank you for the suggestion. I will write a more extended thing about this and put it in essay form and post it as an essay.

[Jerrybaldy]

There is a rift of biblical proportion between THE truth and something that you personally accept as being true. It is one of those things that make the god squad so damn annoying. If this makes me a murderer of your written word then hey ho.
JB

[PrinceMyshkin]

There is a rift of biblical proportion between THE truth and something that you personally accept as being true. It is one of those things that make the god squad so damn annoying. If this makes me a murderer of your written word then hey ho.
JB

Right on! And I note that the same one who declares his "truth" to be the truth also designates anyone who holds a different opinion an "enemy" - not a fellow human being who has a different opinion but an enemy.

[Jassy Melson]

No. What I specifically state is that my enemies are murderers of my spoken thoughts, and I turn it around and say, the enemies of my spoken thoughts are murderers. Are you my enemy? I don't think so. I also state clearly that I am not getting around the murderers by declaring my spoken thoughts on the internet; hence, any objection to my spoken thoughts on the net is not an "enemy" of mine. Because the net is not considered speaking in public.

[Delta40]

The poem sounds like a jumble of thoughts where truth and truth overlap and become confused with one another. I think the enemy is ambiguous. It's rather like someone condeming the human race for their actions as if they themselves are not part of it but I don't think that is your intention here.

I like the self-critique through the poem.

[Jassy Melson]

Thank you for your comment. And you're right--it wasn't my intention.
If my post begins an avalanche of objections and protests, I will simply stop replying to them, and get to work on elaborating and extending the prose poem into an essay.

[Jerrybaldy]

Jesus died for me, you say and only the so-called christians, would object to your term of murderers (to those who object to your spoken word), implying yourself as a true christian. Then you decide in some convoluted way, that it is ok to object to you in written form. But terror of terrors you may with hold further comment and withdraw to write an essay if too many people protest.

Well your unintended homour sure gave me a laugh Mr Melson. I havent had such fun since I coveted my neighbours Ox. Although to be fair, that was some ox.

[Jassy Melson]

It's still peaceful enough to reply to the posts, so I will continue for now. All I will say is I find it incredible that only two posters offered positive suggestions to me. All the other posts are simply fulfilling a truth about my post

[hillwalker]

I thought the line 'We have ways of making you not talk' was witty and original - and in its context amusing.

But much of this is like reading a pamphlet handed out by door-steppers - neither a poem nor a prose poem - there, I've said it.....


There are only a few ways to get around these murderers:
through poetry, drama, school courses,
and going to a church.
I'm not getting around it right now
because what I "say" on the internet
is not being spoken in public.

Where is the poetry in that?????

(Some might say it's not a prose poem either. I must admit
it lacks rhythm and form in some places.)

I'd be amazed that anyone would say the opposite - it lacks poeticism, full stop.

H

[Jassy Melson]

Thank you for your comment. Your post fulfilled the accuracy of my post. I state that some will say my post is not a prose poem, and I acknolwdge that it lacks rhythm and form in some places. Also, your post showed me that I do need to elaborate and extend my post to an essay. It really does not fit in the poetry section.