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MANICHAEAN
01-28-2011, 12:24 PM
TO THOSE YOU REALLY LOVE.

There is perhaps nothing more distasteful and sordid than being in a one way relationship. And for the purpose of this story, I write only from the male perspective.

There was such a man; lets call him Allen, who found himself about ten years ago in such a situation. It was of his own doing, for he should never have accepted the invitation of the middle aged woman seated next to him on an airline flight to “Come and stay anytime at my place in Jamaica on the North Coast.” It was tempting, she seemed good company and it was, to be blatantly honest, convenient.

But then life’s not that straight forward, especially when there is a cross purpose between the two species. All went well at first, very civilized, very relaxing. Then the trip to Kingston to meet the brother and his wife, trip out on the catamaran to the keys and a swim, followed by dinner.

“I’ll only be really happy when I see my sister married” was the first signal raised & Allen should at that juncture have absorbed what he was getting into. He was enmeshed, as he soon perceived by good manners and social norms.

Back later that evening at the villa, the woman, (let’s call her Cecelia) was nervous. Allen realized that he was somehow expected to make a move, but he baulked. If there is no sexual attraction, then that’s it, no use fighting it. Is one supposed to don the guise of a male whore with the assumed felicity that one played as Cassius in a youthful school play?

And so there was what is termed “an atmosphere.” Allen was adamant not to perform & Cecelia took out her frustration at dusk with a machete on the garden undergrowth.

Relief came in the form of a visit the next day of Cecelia’s daughter and her vegetarian husband. A kind of peace ensued.

But Allen was restless. He spoke to the Jamaican steward. “Any place around here where I can listen to some good Reggie?” he asked.

“Sure man, up in de hills near my place, dere dis mampi girl don’t dance to the reggie man. Come on up wid I.”

It was like manna from heaven, the excuse of a cultural excursion to get out of the house.

And so Allen made his excuses, politely but firmly, that he would be back late as he was going to listen to some “indigenous” music.

Cecelia caught her under lip between her teeth and made a strange grimace, half false smile, half anguish. She’d lost control.

It was a warm Caribbean night and the breeze was coming in, slightly humid from the sea. But Allen and the steward took it slow as they climbed upward along a dirt road, up past the sugar cane into the hills of the interior. The stars in the Jamaican heavens seemed to proclaim the deliverance of mankind and back on earth, Allen quietly said “Amen” to that sentiment.

The venue once reached was a small affair. A round bar with about six drinkers and at the end a small stage with a painted red plastered wall behind. They had a couple of drinks & then the steward left to be with his family.

Allen sat and observed.

The mampi girl got up on the stage. Her face was disfigured and some teeth were missing.

But the body was perfection. An essential flame, soft-skinned and with toned limbs.

She faced the wall & gyrated. Contortions of the back, with arms placed high on the wall and tight buttocks that dipped and withdrew to the spirit of the loud music from adjacent speakers.

She finished & repaired to the bar & Allen sent down an invitation for a drink.

She came to him and looked in his face for the signs of disgust at the affliction she was so acquainted with.

“I liked your act” he said bravely and genuinely.

She gave a restrained smile, and as if an explanation was required, told how a cooker had once exploded in her face.

Allen could not but express inwardly a recognition of the depth of character of this girl, who night by night got up on stage and threw all in the face of a male audience.

“You can see a half of my body that you desire, you are fascinated and frightened by a face which you know is on the other side, a shared secret, but you choose not to look away!”

“Who has the strength?” this dancer seemed to say.

She leaned close in against Allen, “Come on up near the stage for my next performance”

His hand rested against her backside and it was as solid as the top of the bar.

That night she invited him home to her small neat house and he left in the morning as the sun was rising.

Back at the villa Cecelia was testy as if she knew all.

But it was his decision. He thought back to the dancer.

When you have loved a woman once, you never really stop loving them.

everyadventure
01-28-2011, 12:44 PM
After comparing this to your last piece, I get the impression that this was hastily written. There are parts that don't feel consistent: I have a hard time believing that a man would accept the invitation of a woman who is a complete stranger, when he is not even attracted to her. And it seems that if he's the type of man to follow this type of impulse, he might, in a similar manner, "go with the flow" when it came to being intimate with her.

Still, there are authentic lines: "Is one supposed to don the guise of a male whore with the assumed felicity that one played as Cassius in a youthful school play?" [Sadly, I have male friends who do precisely that.]

I'm intrigued by this man's complex set of morals... I am not sexually attracted, therefore I will not have sex. Conversely, I can ignore this woman's ugly face, as long as her body is beautiful. The line "but it was his decision," smacks of moral superiority, as though this man is throwing up his hands and saying, "what else could I do? Who could blame me?" Very interesting.

The last line... you speak of "love." Was there love here? I might just lose that line altogether.

MANICHAEAN
01-28-2011, 01:43 PM
Dear everyadventure

Yes. There are men that like the company of women without having to be intimate. Just as there are women that men are physically attracted to. But this was a story of where misjudgement was made by the man and how it unfolded. The "go with the flow" suggestion on my part regards aspects of the Chinese story relates to an entirely different style.

This is not the tale of a Chinese lady of distinction & sensitivity. We are looking at grass root Jamaican's who lead a tough existence. Sorry if the morals of the characters are so basic and it offends. I should warn you that I write at both extremes of the spectrum.

"Moral superiority?" Yes you are spot on. The man Allen, (rightly or wrongly) is expected to make the first move and thus has an unfair advantage to pick and choose. No, I did not express sympathy for Cecelia, but by George it evoked a reaction on your part!

Trust we remain on talking terms?

Regards
M.
(P.S. I'm standing by what I said on love.)

hillwalker
01-28-2011, 02:35 PM
I can fully understand what drove Allen to behave the way he did - his choice was either to give in to manipulation or go off and do 'his own thing' just to spite Cecilia.

Sexual poiltics aside, this only took off once you got the formal preliminaries out of the way. I'll admit I'm totally put off by the author intervening to introduce the characters in such a self-conscious manner.....

There was such a man; lets call him Allen - or -
Back later that evening at the villa, the woman, (let’s call her Cecelia) was nervous.

and pontificating on how straightforward or not life is. I'd much prefer the writer tell the tale and be allowed to reach my own conclusions. But that's a stylistic blind spot - me being picky.

H

everyadventure
01-28-2011, 02:52 PM
You've misinterpreted my tone :) I feel no sympathy for Cecilia's predicament. And I am not offended by this man's behavior; I find it intriguing. Certainly it would be more base for him to have slept with Cecilia, and the story would have been immeasurably less interesting had he piously refrained altogether.

I'm impressed by the way you can effortlessly cross cultural barriers with your writing... something I, considerably untraveled, undoubtedly don't appreciate fully. I confess I didn't take Cecilia's background and lifestyle into consideration when pondering her behavior, but your description of this grass-roots Jamaican definitely makes sense.

BTW, the first line is pure gold. It should be engraved on a plaque :)

And for the record? I never take literature personally.