Honest Villan

[drew3r1]

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[hillwalker]

I'm not sure what 'poetry' you were reading but I suggest you read some more. The rhyme scheme seems to have taken over this piece.

Does the acquiescence and fear of knowing what i'm doing tonight,
have to be the Kryptonite of what we hold so tight and forthright?

4 -'ite's in such a short space are overpowering - it's as if you've thrown in words that rhyme with Kryptonite regardless of any meaning. The entire couplet is difficult to understand because of this.

My advice - if you are writing poetry, look at making sure you express yourself clearly before attempting to get clever with rhyme. This is not much fun to read.

H